I cant feel it anymore

[AnimeLover121]

I cant feel the pain inside me anymore
Now it's just emptiness and darkness
I dont know what happened but like i said
Now it's just me,emptiness and darkness.

[Bakiryu]

So pretty and short, mayhaps you should integrate this into a bigger poem :)

[Pendragon]

Soft warning, not harsh. Coming close to the words of Garth Brooks' Song Anymore both in this poem and your other. You want to insure that the thoughts expressed are your own. Nothing wrong with following the tune or format, I love the song, and the viedo is better, but I want to hear you express your feelings.

Right now it sounds as if you are feeling empty and down. Show me in the poem the depth of that abyss of emptyness, how the sound echoes of the walls, show me how far down you feel you have sank, and then show me what it is that keeps you going, the person you are tired of pretending you do not like, or the hope that you are tired of burying.

You have a lot to share, I'll bet you didn't think that when I began. You do. Everyone has a story and a storyteller. Let yours free. You do not need to imitate others, I have faith in you. I don't bet on people I don't think have talent. You'll do fine.

Best Wishes and welcome, by the way

Pen

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