On Laid Back Lane

[Poppy]

On Laid Back Lane

A dusty gravel road crosses a low water bridge
over which flows a cool mountain creek.
I notice brownie’s scurrying for cover as
the truck slowly rolls across.

As I make my way up the hill and around
the bend a doe and its child leap a fence.
Stopping, I gaze in amazement how unaware
they are of my stare and wonderment.

Moving along I become almost hypnotized
by quick flashes of light and dark.
The setting sun spits rays through webs
of trees, leaves and limbs.

Shading the glare I nearly hit a roadrunner
as it hurries across the road.
This time there is no coyote to follow wanting
a quick before dinner snack.

The window is half rolled down allowing cool air
to refresh my sweating face.
A smell of fresh cut hay permeates the cab
and cicadas sing their thirteen year song.

It’s not far now, as I head down the valley to home,
I’ll go up one more hill, then a turn.
When I get to the top, there it is, just as always,
a golden globe making ready for its rest.

Up my path I think of my journey, of all the things
that I saw brand new and old.
I never tire of this trip; no it’s never boring or dull,
its just God’s way of showing off.

[motherhubbard]

Oh Pop, that was beautiful. You’ve turned out to be as talented as you are prolific.

[Poppy]

Do you recognize the lane?

[Granny5]

This is what I like best:


Moving along I become almost hypnotized
by quick flashes of light and dark.
The setting sun spits rays through webs
of trees, leaves and limbs.

It's a very lovely poem, Poppy. And you said you weren't much of a poet!
btw, I know the lane.

[kiz_paws]

Poppy, that was a beautiful poem, and the subject matter is very close to my heart. Thank you for painting those beautiful scenes for me to feel, see, hear, and smell. :) Kizzo

[Pendragon]

I hope you take this as a compliment. Your atvar reminds me of a certain author whose books I treasure, Patrick F, MacManus, and your poems are about the homespun life I cherish as well.

Pen

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[Poppy]

I hope you take this as a compliment. Your atvar reminds me of a certain author whose books I treasure, Patrick F, MacManus, and your poems are about the homespun life I cherish as well.

Pen

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Pen, thanks a bunch. Coming from someone as talented as you I do find this a nice compliment. MacManus, by the way is one of my favorites and have enjoyed his columns in Outdoor Life for it seems like decades. Have you ever read how the The Rancid Crabtree Fly-Fishing & Filosofical Society got it's name. The explanation is on his website at:
http://www.mcmanusbooks.com/merchandise/cap.html

[Poppy]

Poppy, that was a beautiful poem, and the subject matter is very close to my heart. Thank you for painting those beautiful scenes for me to feel, see, hear, and smell. :) Kizzo

Thanks for the kind words Kiz.

[PrinceMyshkin]

All along the way I was thinking, this is a bloody good ramble with an amiable companion till I got to this


It’s not far now, as I head down the valley to home,
I’ll go up one more hill, then a turn.
When I get to the top, there it is, just as always,
a golden globe making ready for its rest.

Up my path I think of my journey, of all the things
that I saw brand new and old.
I never tire of this trip; no it’s never boring or dull,
its just God’s way of showing off.

whereupon I realized it was that, all right, and a whole lot more! I love poems that sneak up on me like that!

[ampoule]

I love the way God show's off and she got to do it again in your poem. ;)

[motherhubbard]

Well Pop, reading it sounded like my house, but then i thought that it sounds like about every place around here. Is it my little yellow house on the hill?

[andave_ya]

That's so cool! I love this! Brownies scurrying for cover and God's way of showing off. Lovely!

[Poppy]

Well Pop, reading it sounded like my house, but then i thought that it sounds like about every place around here. Is it my little yellow house on the hill?

Why of course its yours. :wave:



andave_ya: Thanks for the comments.

[Pendragon]

Pen, thanks a bunch. Coming from someone as talented as you I do find this a nice compliment. MacManus, by the way is one of my favorites and have enjoyed his columns in Outdoor Life for it seems like decades. Have you ever read how the The Rancid Crabtree Fly-Fishing & Filosofical Society got it's name. The explanation is on his website at:
http://www.mcmanusbooks.com/merchandise/cap.htmlOh, yeah! From The Bear in the Attic. I have all of Pat's books, even the new ones he's writng about Sheriff Bo Tully. He's gone into slightly humorous mysteries, but familiar names pop up like Pinto Jack, and the Scragg Family, among others. Pap Tully is a mysterious character that leaves you wondering. Pat drops hints about who he might be, but never says. He has two novels out on Bo Tully The Blight Way and Avalanche. They make fine reading.

Pen.

[Poppy]

Oh, yeah! From The Bear in the Attic. . He has two novels out on Bo Tully The Blight Way and Avalanche. They make fine reading.

Pen.

Thanks I think I will find them. I am sure it would make great Winter time reading. I need to dig up some of the older ones too. I just finished his
Outdoor Life column tonight. Its an expose of what a worm scholar he is.;)

[ampoule]

Thanks I think I will find them. I am sure it would make great Winter time reading. I need to dig up some of the older ones too. I just finished his
Outdoor Life column tonight. Its an expose of what a worm scholar he is.;)

It was my husband's dream to build a worm farm on our property in Kentucky. Is this the kind of worm scholar you are alluding to?

[Poppy]

It was my husband's dream to build a worm farm on our property in Kentucky. Is this the kind of worm scholar you are alluding to?

:D :D :D :D Well Amp, a worm farmer does not make a worm scholar. A worm scholar must spend years upon years of research into the fine details of wormry! For instance did you know there are 1600 species of worms? Did you know that worms grow no faster in manure than in good top soil? And did you know that worms do not feel pain? See these are the types of things that a worm scholar would carry about. Now with that said, Do you want to spend many hours worrying about worms? But believe me if your husband wants to start farming those little slimey creatures he would never have to be a worm scholar. I would say go for it. :nod:

[firefangled]

This is beautiful, Poppy. Your poems remind me of William Stafford. If you've never read any of his, I think you would like them.

[Poppy]

This is beautiful, Poppy. Your poems remind me of William Stafford. If you've never read any of his, I think you would like them.

Thank you so much Fire, I am flattered to say the least. I am not familiar with Stafford but I soon will be. Thanks for the tip.

[Poppy]

I love the way God show's off and she got to do it again in your poem. ;)

Thanks amp, God, she does throw us a picture or two doesn't she!

[ampoule]

My husband was definitely a worm scholar. He had quite a library and he could spout off worm trivia like you wouldn't believe. ;) I was worried he was going to be like that guy Bubba the shrimper in Forrest Gump. :)

[Poppy]

My husband was definitely a worm scholar. He had quite a library and he could spout off worm trivia like you wouldn't believe. ;) I was worried he was going to be like that guy Bubba the shrimper in Forrest Gump. :)

:lol: :lol: :lol:

[AuntShecky]

Nice word picture. It appears to be more like a "prose poem" than verse. It seems to be a stream of simple declarative sentences, broken more or less randomly, instead of a conscious attempt to make linebreaks. If you're writing free verse without formalized meter or rhyme, you might want to employ other poetric devices.
What is the emotion and or thought you are trying to convey? And who is "brownie"? If it's a proper noun, should it be capitalized?
Please think of these as suggestions, not criticism, as I say I truly like the word picture.

[motherhubbard]

Aunt- you have great advice. A brownie is a kind of little fish.

[Granny5]

Aunt- you have great advice. A brownie is a kind of little fish.

A brownie is a small mouth bass. Some are quite big although Poppy hasn't actually had a large one on his line!:lol: