The Only Path Ahead

[CdnReader]

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The only path ahead
is through admission of our weaknesses,
confronting our inner selves,
recognizing the redundancy of
our separate solitudes.

We are all fragile,
yet our spirits are unyielding.

Give up to me your sadness,
your fears, your tears,
your loneliness, your despair...
as I give you mine.

Reach into my eyes
with your drenched spirit gaze.
Do you not see the truth therein?
Neither shadows nor blindness can penetrate here.

Let time sweep us into tomorrow,
where love is created anew,
where strength builds through togetherness.

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[Granny5]

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The only path ahead
is through admission of our weaknesses,
confronting our inner selves,
recognizing the redundancy of
our separate solitudes.

We are all fragile,
yet our spirits are unyielding.

Give up to me your sadness,
your fears, your tears,
your loneliness, your despair...
as I give you mine.

Reach into my eyes
with your drenched spirit gaze.
Do you not see the truth therein?
Neither shadows nor blindness can penetrate here.

Let time sweep us into tomorrow,
where love is created anew,
where strength builds through togetherness.

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Cdn, you know I'm a fan, but this is so nice. It says so much about true relationships. It reminds me of me and my husband, especailly this


"Give up to me your sadness,
your fears, your tears,
your loneliness, your despair...
as I give you mine."

It's beautiful.

[Sweets America]

Oh, how I love this new poem! You have no idea of how your poem speaks directly to my heart right now! This is very beautiful, as Granny says. Forgetting about the fears, giving oneself to the other with faith in the fact that it will be ok in the end.

[CdnReader]

Cdn, you know I'm a fan, but this is so nice. It says so much about true relationships. It reminds me of me and my husband,

With all the loving chit-chat back and forth, and all the beautiful talent exhibited by your family this past week, I must admit that Granny & Poppy became a part of the thought process as I re-read before posting it here. :) I'm glad you liked it, Granny.


Oh, how I love this new poem! You have no idea of how your poem speaks directly to my heart right now! This is very beautiful, as Granny says. Forgetting about the fears, giving oneself to the other with faith in the fact that it will be ok in the end.

Thank you, Sweets! :) I think when I was writing, it wasn't so much about everything being OK in the end, but more that sharing fears, pains, and disappointments -- in a spirit of love and openness -- is part of what being truly connected is all about. That we are not separate "islands" doomed to suffer, but that there are loving places where we can come together and find strength.

[firefangled]

CdN, this is beautiful. True strength and happiness strangely come from vulnerability, as you have written.

This is an excellent poem about sharing our way to love. Thank you.

[firefangled]

That we are not separate "islands" doomed to suffer, but that there are loving places where we can come together and find strength.

Thank you for saying this this way, Cdn. I was at a loss for words. These friendships here in this forum are unique. Perhaps they are never meant to go beyond the world of mind and emotion and there is nothing wrong with that.

A forum like this is what letter writing used to be, often between people who never met, but it was so wonderful to know that somewhere out there someone or many people cared about who you were. They cared without wanting anything in return, but caring. That is hard to come by and we have seen it here over and over.

All of you have made a difference in my life.

Look what just this one poem has generated from several responses. Thanks again Cdn!!

[CdnReader]

I couldn't agree more, Firefangled. I have found friendships and comfort and a sense of "belonging" in on-line communities like this for a very long time, amongst groups of individuals that I will likely never meet. Somedays now, I feel so adrift from my "real-life" support system, almost all of whom live half a world away. These forums, and the friends I've found through them, keep me sane. This comment....


They cared without wanting anything in return, but caring.

YES! Thank you for that! Isn't it amazing how much giving happens here, and how very little taking. Certainly a miracle in today's world. :)

Thanks so much for your kind words, FF. Much appreciated.

[Sweets America]

I agree with everything that was said in this thread.
Cdn, I see what you wanted to convey in this poem. About 'everything being alright in the end', I meant that our fears that we experience when we are alone, we shouldn't be afraid of talking about them with the right persons, of sharing them. 'It will be alright' because when we dare share those fears, hopes and such, we realize that they are heard, that we are not the only ones experiencing them and that this knowkedge gives us strength to accept them or fight them.

[ampoule]

Most beautiful, Cdn. And the sentiments expressed by others, I agree.

[CdnReader]

Sweets.... YES! :D

Amp....Many thanks. :)

[Pendragon]

Seperate solitudes... totally describes the poets here on litnet, but I think we are growing closer through our poems. Wonderful work, Cdn!

Pen

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[CdnReader]

This is a lovely community of kind and wise souls, Pen. I'm grateful to be a part of it. :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

For me this begins - as a poem - at



Give up to me your sadness,
your fears, your tears,
your loneliness, your despair...
as I give you mine.

Reach into my eyes
with your drenched spirit gaze.
Do you not see the truth therein?
Neither shadows nor blindness can penetrate here.

Let time sweep us into tomorrow,
where love is created anew,
where strength builds through togetherness.

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and then carries on more musically, with more yearning. Although I'm prone to the didactic myself, I am on the whole with Keats: "We hate poetry that has a palpable design on us..."

[CdnReader]

Wow. I see very clearly how much more powerful that becomes with the first two stanzas cut. Thank you so much for your input, Jer! I knew chasing you around for a comment would be worth the effort. :)