God is in the Detail

[TheFifthElement]

Inspired by Life on Mars. This may need some explanation.

God is in the Detail

Void.
Silver spirals.
Eight coloured marbles.
Blue-green spinning bauble.
Fictitious borders separate fictitious races.
Crowded urban spaces feed collective need.
Grey snaking river on which ants crawl.
Geometric construction protects against the evils of nature.
Several cubic feet of bone, and blood, and meat.
An ongoing mystery that forms the centre of our universe.
The recollection of a mother’s love; of life and its ending.

[firefangled]

Inspired by Life on Mars. This may need some explanation.

God is in the Detail

Void.
Silver spirals.
Eight coloured marbles.
Blue-green spinning bauble.
Fictitious borders separate fictitious races.
Crowded urban spaces feed collective need.
Grey snaking river on which ants crawl.
Geometric construction protects against the evils of nature.
Several cubic feet of bone, and blood, and meat.
An ongoing mystery that forms the centre of our universe.
The recollection of a mother’s love; of life and its ending.

I like this rendering of the cycle. I've often wondered how many times the universe has collapsed or ended and regenerated. But there still remains the question of the prime mover and therein lies your poem. Very nicely done.

[Virgil]

Inspired by Life on Mars. This may need some explanation.

God is in the Detail

Void.
Silver spirals.
Eight coloured marbles.
Blue-green spinning bauble.
Fictitious borders separate fictitious races.
Crowded urban spaces feed collective need.
Grey snaking river on which ants crawl.
Geometric construction protects against the evils of nature.
Several cubic feet of bone, and blood, and meat.
An ongoing mystery that forms the centre of our universe.
The recollection of a mother’s love; of life and its ending.

I like this poem quite a bit FifthE. I particularly thought these lines were interesting: "Grey snaking river on which ants crawl." and "Several cubic feet of bone, and blood, and meat." and "The recollection of a mother’s love; of life and its ending." I think that's a really nice conclusion.

This line is a cliche though and I think you should reconsider: "An ongoing mystery that forms the centre of our universe." I know that's the central meaning of the poem, but I think the title conveys that meaning. Perhaps you can find another interesting detail in its place.

[TheFifthElement]

Thanks firefangled & Virgil for your comments. I see what you mean Virgil about the 'an ongoing mystery...' line, actually this is meant to represent the mind (not God -despite the title!) but I agree, it is a little cliche'd. I'll definitely rework that line.