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ampoule
08-16-2007, 10:38 AM
Depression

Serendipity!!
I found a sunken treasure and I wasn't even looking!!
I
...dived
......down
..........deep
to take a look and saw that it was full of wonderful things!
Breathless, I surfaced, giddy with excitement, light shining in my eyes.
I held the precious pearl up to him while treading water, laughing
and splashing water at him, and he took it and turned it in his fingers
and held it between his teeth, and then he said no.
And then..................he dropped it.
Slowly I sank and covered myself with silt and sand and salty tears
and barnacles grew as I watched him sail away.
Not a soul could find me until he came back one day.
Giddy with excitement, light shining in my eyes, I packed my bags
and hired a rig that went out to sea to the place I knew so well.
I dived off the side and tied the rope around the treasure.
Together we turned the crankshaft and just as it broke through the water,
that dreaded silence....the chain snapped and
...down
.......down
............down
it sank as I searched his face for something, anything, but got nothing.
I am so exhausted but I know where the treasure lies.
I can bring it to the surface whenever he wants, if only he would want.
I think he wants the treasure without me.


And yet another poem from The Pathetic Years
amp June Second TwoThousandTwo
I probably should change the title to Ridiculous. I am just reworking some old poems. I hope you aren't too weary of them.

PrinceMyshkin
08-16-2007, 08:19 PM
Above all, I love the freedom in this, the indifference to the strictures of line length and rhyme, and of course the ending, his wanting the treasure without you, that's painful...

ampoule
08-16-2007, 08:48 PM
Above all, I love the freedom in this, the indifference to the strictures of line length and rhyme, and of course the ending, his wanting the treasure without you, that's painful...

Do you really Prince? Is that allowed, that indifference?

PrinceMyshkin
08-17-2007, 05:13 PM
Do you really Prince? Is that allowed, that indifference?

What you mean "Do I really"? You think I'd flatter a woman in the hope of getting her to put out? I mean, would that work with YOU?

About the indifference, yeh, it's allowed although sheer blazing contempt for the strictures would be better any time.