Teenage Love

[CrazyZorro]

I was really bored and I don't write poetry so please give me your honest oppinions on this.


It's prom night here we are
Standing side by side
Our third long year together and I still can't decide
He slightlly grabs my hand and pulls me to the floor
We glide along like angels and drift slowly toward the door
He says don't you worry
I know where we should go
My stomach leaps and jumps and I follow really slow
He pecks me slightly on the cheek
Receiving it with glea
I wonder where we're going
Why won't he just tell me
We settle down in the seats
Of his old pickup truck
The engine rolles on over
And his door slams on shut
Driving down the country road he takes a little right
Theres a blanket and some candles filling up the night
A basket with some munchies
And music playing softly
He glides on to my door
And opens it with ease
Puts forth his smooth hand
And asks mam may I help you please
My mind starts running wild
Could this be the guy
He kisses me on the cheak and say
Darling I love you
Want to know why?
He whispers in my ear you're beautiful tonight
I want to spend my life with you
Does that sound alright?
Now my eyes are filled with tears
My head is shaking yes
I know for sure he's the one
No more uncertainties I say
It's only you and me

[Bakiryu]

No offense but this poem sounds like a dumb teenage things when she falls for some sleazy smooth-talikg guy who in the end is only going to break her heart.

[CrazyZorro]

No offense but this poem sounds like a dumb teenage things when she falls for some sleazy smooth-talikg guy who in the end is only going to break her heart.

Nontaken I would agree with you but I make up the rest in my head and it all ends up great lol thanks for the input next time that i write something with girl and guy i will think about how the guy seems thanks again

[ampoule]

I think it was very sweet and I remember a time like you describe so I was wanting to say...GET BACK IN THE TRUCK AND TAKE HER HOME RIGHT NOW!!

But about the poem..again, touching. Check your spelling.
I actually liked 'engine rolles on over' and 'door slams on shut'. Sounds just like my Alabama friend. :)

[CrazyZorro]

amp thank you so much i have never bee good at spelling so i just said who cares and those 2 things that you liked most i thought didnt really fit in much but i cant wait for this moment to happen to me so i thought i would write it down