Young Flesh, Wise Heart

[PrinceMyshkin]

I am a satyr
in the face of your
young flesh and
agile mind.

Your mind, my love,
that is more
sexually alluring
than another’s
most perky breasts
and gleaming
mons veneris!

Ah, could I but
fit myself between
your mind’s
most lovely thighs
and enter then
that passage of delight!

I need not ask
any other light.

[Granny5]

WOW Prince! WOW
(You must have met someone. Good for you)
This is something. It's very passionate and very good.

[amanda_isabel]

WOW Prince! WOW
(You must have met someone. Good for you)
This is something. It's very passionate and very good.

i agree! congrats on meeting someone, or on meeting whatever inspired you to write this!

[CdnReader]

That's a pretty amazing piece of work, Mr N..... :D

[Sweets America]

OH MY GOD.
WOW. :blush: :blush:

Thank you so much, Sweet Jerry. Your words are so beautiful. I don't know what to say but thank you. :blush: :D

[stephofthenight]

wow thats realy well interweived verry smooth

[MaryLupin]

I need not ask
no other light.



I need not ask
any other light.

???

And of course I agree with the consensus. It is wonderful.

[Sweets America]

I need not ask
any other light.

???

And of course I agree with the consensus. It is wonderful.

I think 'no other light' sounds great. I don't want any word of this poem to be changed. I want it to remain just as it was when Jerry put it on the paper, and I want to keep this emotion intact in my heart.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I need not ask
any other light.

???

And of course I agree with the consensus. It is wonderful.

Yes I tussled with that double negatrive at the time, decided that I rather liked the colloquial emphasis it gave as when one might say: "I don't need nobody!" but I've made the change.

[CdnReader]

I noticed the double negative. Within the context of the rest of the poem, it didn't bother me. But if you feel the need to make the correction, you could always come at it from the opposite direction.....

I need ask
no other light.

Just a thought.

[Sweets America]

I don't like the change, Jer. :bawling: :( :bawling:

[Bii]

This is very passionate Jer, albeit verging a little too close to the pornographic for my taste. It's a good poem though.

I think the amended version works better, apart from the grammatical improvement the repetition of the 'n' sound in such a small space was a little cloying in the original.

[MaryLupin]

I noticed the double negative. Within the context of the rest of the poem, it didn't bother me. But if you feel the need to make the correction, you could always come at it from the opposite direction.....

I need ask
no other light.

Just a thought.

And a good thought it is too.

[firefangled]

I am a satyr
in the face of your
young flesh and
agile mind.

Your mind, my love,
that is more
sexually alluring
than another’s
most perky breasts
and gleaming
mons veneris!

Ah, could I but
fit myself between
your mind’s
most lovely thighs
and enter then
that passage of delight!

I need not ask
any other light.




I step away for two weeks and the world changes for the better....hmmmm.

I'm raising this to the top where it belongs for its poetry as well as its subject matter. The ending...oh everything is such a wonderful expression, but the ending is exquisite.

[motherhubbard]

Prince, I haven't known how to respond to this. It is lovely, but in a way that escapes words. I think silence is needed after reading such a poem as this. very personal and I love the way you make love to the mind here.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Prince, I haven't known how to respond to this. It is lovely, but in a way that escapes words. I think silence is needed after reading such a poem as this. very personal and I love the way you make love to the mind here.

Having written and posted wonderful poems of your own, you undoubtedly know what it means to get a response like this - especially from someone you know, admire, respect - and love!

[PrinceMyshkin]

We're caught between
the eye and the hook
of love. Of that which is good
too much is only just
nearly enough. More
is the jaw that gapes for love,
the impossibly dear.



J. Newman Sudden Proclamations © 1992

[kiz_paws]

Prince, I haven't known how to respond to this. It is lovely, but in a way that escapes words. I think silence is needed after reading such a poem as this. very personal and I love the way you make love to the mind here.

Well said, M-H. I enjoyed the poem (with or without the change). ;)

She is a lucky girl indeed to have poetry written like this in her honor.