release me

[CdnReader]

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release me

release me from the bonds
that keep my feet stuck
my heart chained
my vision clouded

i want to fly...
sail beyond the perimeter
of what can be imagined

i want to surge past the horizon
and let the sea take me away...
i want to dance on the curve of the wind
and breathe in the future

do not hold me here
when it is freedom i desire

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[PrinceMyshkin]

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release me

release me from the bonds
that keep my feet stuck
my heart chained
my vision clouded

i want to fly...
sail beyond the perimeter
of what can be imagined

i want to surge past the horizon
and let the sea take me away...
i want to dance on the curve of the wind
and breathe in the future

do not hold me here
when it is freedom i desire

.
cdn/25apr07
.

Much as I loved the flow of this, the impassioned wishes, I missed a hint of whether it was a human love-object that was being addressed or 'God.'

In neither case, as well, was there anything from which one might deduce what keeps the persona imprisoned.

[CdnReader]

Much as I loved the flow of this, the impassioned wishes, I missed a hint of whether it was a human love-object that was being addressed or 'God.'

In neither case, as well, was there anything from which one might deduce what keeps the persona imprisoned.

This is an interesting comment, PM..... I'm trying to step outside my own personal knowledge of what the poem means to me, and see it from this new POV. And I'm wondering if these things NEED to be spelled out, or can they be left to the interpretation of the reader. Hmmm.....I need to think about this some more. :)

Thanks!

[Granny5]

No need to spell it out CdnReader. Let whoever reads it decide if it's to someone who loves you but you're not quite in the same place, or if it's God you're speaking to. It's very nice and will speak to a lot of folks who sometimes feel tied down to a lot of things and situations. I very much enjoyed it. Thank you.

[CdnReader]

I'm glad you liked it, Granny5. Thanks! :)

[Pendragon]

You last two lines say it all. That is what poetry is all about,

do not hold me here
when it is freedom i desire

Dare to break the mold, to not let form rule you, and say what you feel!

Pen

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[CdnReader]

Awww...... Thank you, Pen! :D