If life were a song

[dramasnot6]

If life were a song,
every pulse a note,
I would serenade you.
(but only for a moment)

If life were a song,
love would be voices,
and breathe would be rhythm,
leaving me deaf.

If eternity were music,
I'd known it long ago,
for as we danced,
you died in my arms.

[Pendragon]

I like it a lot, Drama, it just seems a bit short. I don't know what could be missing, but I feel something is... It's good, and you definately want to keep that idea, I don't know, I cannot see the missing lines clearly enough.

Pen

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