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ampoule
07-21-2007, 09:27 AM
Caught In the Act
April Fourteenth TwoThousandTwo

Pick up a stone and throw it at me
But look at it first, what do you see?
Is it smooth, is it shiny, pointed, or small?
Will it hit the target and cause me to fall?
While I am down will you pick up another,
Something much bigger to cause me to suffer?
Each time you deny me, resisting my charms
Is like casting another with hope that it harms
The love that I feel for this person, my friend,
Now throw down those stones and
And go where we've been.

;) From the highly acclaimed book, "Her Pathetic Years". :bawling:

CdnReader
07-21-2007, 09:34 AM
I was half expecting the last line to read, "And go to your room."

(oopss....sorry....hehehe.... love the poem, ampoule)

PrinceMyshkin
07-21-2007, 09:37 AM
May I suggest these changes:

Caught In the Act
April Fourteenth TwoThousandTwo

Pick up a stone and throw it at me
But look at it first, what do you see?
Is it smooth, is it shiny, pointed, or small?
Will it hit the target and cause me to fall?

While I am down will you pick up another,
Something much bigger to cause me to suffer?
Each time you deny me, resisting my charms
Is like casting another with hope that it harms

The love that I feel for this person, my friend,
Now throw down those stones and go where we've been.

;) From the highly acclaimed book, "Her Pathetic Years". :bawling:

Course I googled to see if there was such a book, by someone else, but what came up was a novel: Whores on a Hill!

ampoule
07-21-2007, 09:52 AM
Course I googled to see if there was such a book, by someone else, but what came up was a novel: Whores on a Hill!

LOL...what a picture! And maybe it could be sung to that Beatle's tune, The Fool On The Hill.

And thanks Cdn....I like that....go to your room. LOL

Pendragon
07-21-2007, 11:02 AM
Hee. Yes, a nice poem. I might have expected the last line to be "look out for the ricochet!"

Pen

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formality hater
07-23-2007, 03:48 PM
The poem has a nice ring to it!:(