Winter Morning

[Elly_blue]

Hi guys! I recently started writing short stories and poems.This is my first one

Winter Morning
painted by the night
Covered the world
in beautiful white

Silver sunlight
warming my skin
trying to awake
my passion within

Dark emotions
frozen by the night
Now slowly melting
away in the light

Winter mornings
not always cold and blue
Yesterday I was lost
Today I'm with you

[motherhubbard]

very nice. I don't normally like rhyme, but I liked it here in your simple, lovely poem.

[ampoule]

keep up the good work!

[Countess]

Hey Elle,

I like your use of color/contrast of light and dark (I also am very fond of using these devices). While repeating "Winter Mornings" is perfectly acceptable, you might reconsider the reuse of the word "night" . That's my only suggestion.

[formality hater]

Hi guys! I recently started writing short stories and poems.This is my first one

Winter Morning
painted by the night



Nice!
I liked the simplicity of words!

[babybrother]

Hi guys! I recently started writing short stories and poems.This is my first one

Winter Morning
painted by the night
Covered the world
in beautiful white

Silver sunlight
warming my skin
trying to awake
my passion within

Dark emotions
frozen by the night
Now slowly melting
away in the light

Winter mornings
not always cold and blue
Yesterday I was lost
Today I'm with you

Very nice poem. It makes me feel cozy and comfortable. The use of ryme is nice, it keeps it youthful.