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dibyendra
07-14-2007, 02:34 PM
Moments Of Bliss

we fight with fears and struggle to exist
we cherish moments which make us want to live

we explore meaning of life and reasons to live
we make changes for what we think and what we believe

we see this world and people and we imitate
we are never satisfied of what we have and for what we get

we share time of our life with our family and friends
we keep these moments as memories until the end

we go through bittersweet moments and wait for one fine day
we keep the faith and live in prayers to see true smile on our face

we strive to fulfill our dreams and to find a better life
we seek for place to rest our head with peace of mind

we live on social bonds and faith upon each other
we live for our loved ones and wish to make it stronger

we try to touch the stars yet they are out of reach
we keep ourselves eternally engaged for the moments of bliss

dibyendra
07-14-2007, 02:39 PM
Any comments (suggestions | encouraging | appreciations) will be highly appreciated ! Thank you all for reading my poem !

With best regards,
Dibyendra

symphony
07-14-2007, 08:25 PM
I liked the closing couplet most, dib. I thought some of the lines were a bit cliche-ish, but nevertheless it's a neat piece of work. :)
Keep up the good work.
symph.

dibyendra
07-14-2007, 11:05 PM
I liked the closing couplet most, dib. I thought some of the lines were a bit cliche-ish, but nevertheless it's a neat piece of work. :)
Keep up the good work.
symph.

Thanks symph for your valuable comment. It would have been great if you could write which portion did you find unsatisfactory so that I'll be able to work on that portion finely.

Best,
Dibyendra