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Adolescent09
07-06-2007, 07:33 PM
Thoughts please:

The Predicaments of the Gambler

The stake is all on a stage of poker,
though steady is the astuteness of his hand.
He grazes the duo in a palm like sand
and pristine are his possessions in the air---
but like the maxims of matter they don't stay there,
since the calm of the closure must spread its tips
to relinquish chance for what it gives,
be it adverse or serendepitous.
The loss is the knell of a death blow call
his affluence seeped from thence,
the curtains of endless squander fall,
making the turn of time intense.
and turbulent are the tears of sorrow that float his boat,
which rowed his life through many wants,
wrecked his hull on a cluster of vaunts,
so carelessly taken by cube-filled whites with spots.

Debrasue
07-06-2007, 08:54 PM
Incredible imagery Adol!...This I know because I used to work in a Vegas casino and you did an excellent job of capturing the essence & emotion of that fleeting moment...sorry I can't critique form...but it reads well!

Pendragon
07-07-2007, 10:15 AM
Again, I think you've found your voice, 'Dole. A simple roll of the dice becomes a poetic work of art. Have more confidence in yourself. I see no one saying negative things. http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/Bravo.gif