Stagestruck

[ampoule]

Stagestruck

You are the phantom of my opera dreams.
The notes soar to the rafters of my mind
as you take center stage in my heart.
My love spills out to the wonderment of those
who have come to see me fall, bleeding,
on this cold stage,
And to hear me sing an aria of the things
I hoped would be.

The women shed tears for this tragedy,
And the men offer their kerchiefs
while blinking back tears of their own,
For the times they did not fall in love.
How did I win this part of playing the heroine
when I am nothing more than a two-bit player?
Hear them scream as I tumble into the
orchesta pit before the curtain falls.

[ampoule]

I was hoping.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Stagestruck

You are the phantom of my opera dreams.
The notes soar to the rafters of my mind
as you take center stage in my heart.
My love spills out to the wonderment of those
who have come to see me fall, bleeding,
on this cold stage,
And to hear me sing an aria of the things
I hoped would be.

The women shed tears for this tragedy,
And the men offer their kerchiefs
while blinking back tears of their own,
For the times they did not fall in love.
How did I win this part of playing the heroine
when I am nothing more than a two-bit player?
Hear them scream as I tumble into the
orchesta pit before the curtain falls.

Although everything in this is right and moving I am especially struck by:


And the men offer their kerchiefs
while blinking back tears of their own,
For the times they did not fall in love.

[Debrasue]

Ampoule....I love this poem! It's very Christine to me ....I love that you were able to see and express her emotions...Brava!...and if Christine was not your original intention...Yeah...could be a metaphor...wonderful imagery...

ps...I re-read Bad Dog...and I do see the real meaning you were trying to reveal...the title helped a little...but I think it's amazing that a poem can have more than one meaning & stir different emotional responses from people...depending on where their hearts and minds are at the time!...Sorry I can't help with poetic 'form'....not my expertise....but I love feelings conveyed...

[jon1jt]

hey i saw phantom of the opera! ....great poem! :) i agree with the lines prince quoted. fantastic!

i just didn't get the end about her tumbling into the orchestra pit. that's quite a drop, no? :)

[Pendragon]

Good. The tumbling into the orchestra pit is like dropping out of sight, no? http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/Appaluse.gif

[ampoule]

I cannot thank you all enough for your kind words and suggestions.
As to the last line Jon, 'quite a drop?' you ask....exactly. Love can make us do dreadful things.