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Dalisis
06-18-2007, 12:12 AM
i shine my mind is iluminated
i try but life gets me so frustrated
and i walk, i trip, i try to survive, but they feed me lies
and like an idiot i fall
i always thought that if im lying im dying
but im dying and the only thing is trying.
i see the light i follow it hardcore
but once i reach it, i know i wont comfort and want more
my decisions are stupid til the end
but ive learned and someday everything will be back to place
running and hiding is not part of my future
reminising and crying keeps the past wit me so pure
and im tired all i want is a rest
so much pain and discomfort can take away your best
and yes im insane, something hard to explain
hard to maintain, my minds overflowing with so much pain
i still shine, more than a gold mine.
i will not be fine, forever i will sip this wine
to calm what i feel inside this heart
my minds illuminated but im falling apart

Pendragon
06-18-2007, 09:49 AM
Sounds lies RAP. Which isn't negitive at all, it's good. Careful with spelling is my only words of caution. This rocks!

http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/PuppyLove.gif

symphony
06-18-2007, 10:29 AM
yeah this one'll sound really cool as a song :) . esp. if it's made into a rap, i'll go :banana: lol.

Dalisis
06-18-2007, 07:46 PM
wen i write i recite it fast sort of like a rap but i cant rap lol
i just rush through everything i guess lol but thank you so much for your opinions :-D