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Chava
06-17-2007, 01:57 PM
In the abstract corner, tumbeling with many personal thoguhts at the moment.


Fortnight
It passed my sleeping foot,
Twirled amidst the glimmering candle flare,
Grasped my wrist, emitting heat, chilling my bones

Obscurity
Fleeting snow strays from my ankles,
To cover the sodden prints upon the ground,
The cobbles feel so cold today

Fretfulness
To consider the impending course,
A glance from a midnight crow,
Roused and held awake only for my presence

Undue
The pertained feathers form a darkened collar,
From my hair I form a string,
And all the while a moon starts to sing

Withhold
Upon me the window casts a tattered light,
Fragmented by its consorts, a rowdy packet
Lying beside me is the angel

Pendragon
06-18-2007, 09:54 AM
Wow! Abstract is right, and darn good at that!

heat that "chills my bones"?
"sodden prints" on "cobblestones"? I find this abstract because "sodden" would seem to indicate the footprints are sunken in.
"moon that sings"?
"tattered light"?

Great stuff! A++ Poem, Chava! You rock!

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Chava
06-19-2007, 06:22 AM
Thanks Pen, always nice to hear your comments, tends to make a lazy danish sun try a little harder. :)