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[mushaboo]

This is my latest poem
im a begginer so help me out :)



ǿǿ/ǿǿ/ǿǿ

Title?
my friend it is obvious you don't understand
You are only human, limited in many ways
You think the thoughts you think are grand
but the truth is that they are only a small part
of the things you can

It is a shame though,
a human is a creature of so much potential
but facts like greed,anger,ignorance hold them back
it is a shame they are stupid,
otherwise they wouldn't choose acts like that

As chaves do caminho da certeza estão em suas mãos!
You do not understand?,
No?
Then I suggest you pick up the pace, and get a book
instead of sitting in front af the TV,
as images go by while you look.

Now like my other poems I will change the subject,
No?
Yes!
as I hope you have gotten that book
as now we will test the knowledge that in you should have took
Though I should ask questions,
about subjects like sience and math
but we have little time left
for there will be a time , like everything in this world, that this poem will end
That time is now (...)



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[Pendragon]

You are clever as a poet, Shaboo, but don't fall into error while being clever.

That switch to Spanish was a neat twist. The answer would be something like:

"Si usted hacer no entender , aprender." But then you have this line:



Now like my other poems I will change the subject,
No?
Yes!
as I hope you have gotten that book
as now we will test the knowledge that in you should have took


The word "took" is ungrammatical, and thus a forced rhyme. You want to avoid doing this. Otherwise the poem rocks!

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[mushaboo]

ooo ok
but its not spanish its portugues xD
common mistake they are very similar languages
ok ill try not to do that next time
thanks!