Please give ur honest opinion!!

[Petruchio]

Hi everyone!
Please read the poem and give ur honest opinion, be it positive or negative.
I will really appreciate it!
Thnx!:)

I sit here quitely,
Make to myself, a plea
To get all the answers right,
I really do hope i might!

Should I, or should I not,
Feel and think what I do right now?
Would it be right? Would it be wrong?
Would I feel bad? Is it my own thorn?

Will I regret it? Will I miss it?
Or will I feel exactly the way I do right now?
Is it worth it?, or is it not?
I need to know, oh my God!

I hope I get the answers right!!
For me its turning into a fight!
A fight which I have to win,
But which way is the win???

I do not know,
For the fight.......is simply...me against ME!!

[Turk]

Here's another poem that i am able to understand.

[bazarov]

I really like it. I also ask myself those questions very often.:thumbs_up

[B-Mental]

I had to read it a second time, and warmed up to it. I feel some internal hesitation in the words, but maybe a little confused by the final line "me against me".

[Petruchio]

Thanks everyone for your advise and comments!
About the last line"me against me", basically the entire thing is focused on the fight which we sometimes have with ourselves.
When we don't know whether we should do something or not!
When one part tells us to do it and the other doesn't.
For me, its not very common but, in this one situation it really became a big deal!!!=)
Thanks again all!!!

[Pendragon]

OK. You want Ol' Uncle Pen to be honest. When you write a poem, it should rhyme or not rhyme. Do not mix the two. You are doing a good job of making the reader feel the poem, which is what you want, that is great! But decide which you want, a rhyming poem or free verse. Your first stanza is so good, I'd probably go with that rhyme scheme, and rewrite the poem to match. But do not force rhyme. And read the poem aloud. Some seem to think because words are spelled alike they rhyme. No. Read and see. Best of luck!

Pen

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[Petruchio]

Thanks alot Pendragon!
I'll keep that in mind for the future!=)