Rage poem Pt 2 comin soon

[UltimaHybrid]

ok here is the part one of my Rage poem.. any suggestions to a second one are welcome.. what isnt welcome are put downs or discouragement.. got it?? so read it and be nice ... later

Rage Pt.1

I take my Fear and my Humilation
I crush it into my fist
I open up my hand i have diamonds
My Diamonds are my Rage
I have Diamonds in my eyes

[the silent x]

very good, i have similar poems except i go deeper into my mind. i like how you attribute rage to something considered beautiful to women, and also, one of the hardest things on earth. i consider rage to be the best place to be, especially when i am insulted, cause then everything rolls off, and if it doesn't i have enough adrenaline flowing to start the beatings right there

[UltimaHybrid]

and someone has cracked my poems purpose.. dont worry i got more of this poem comin... its just hard to keep it relevant

[the silent x]

don't worry about revelence, when i am in an anger fit, i don't care whether i'm on topic or not, if you want, i can post one of mine

[symphony]

ok here is the part one of my Rage poem.. any suggestions to a second one are welcome.. what isnt welcome are put downs or discouragement.. got it?? so read it and be nice ... later

Rage Pt.1

I take my Fear and my Humilation
I crush it into my fist
I open up my hand i have diamonds
My Diamonds are my Rage
I have Diamonds in my eyes

*intimidated by the massive rage and gulping hard* it's pretty good. I liked the "I have diamonds in my eyes" line very much. And *gulp* I hope I'm being nice...! :p

[UltimaHybrid]

Rage Pt.2

With the diamonds of Rage in my eyes
You see only the One thing I want in turn
You saw what I used to be…Inside
I am what you wanted Me to be.

A machine of Complete Hate
A machine of Complete Rage
A machine of Complete Feral

I feel something Dark is creeping
Something inside changing Me


heres the other part theres more

[UltimaHybrid]

sorry people i was at my aunts house for awhile and she's trying to get me into her church...even though i specifically asked her not to...anyway later