Global Warming

[aashishameya]

Melted relationships;
Too hot to handle
Just like a candle
Burning from inside-out
Sank hearts;
In the flood of tears
Turbulent waves inside home
Though whole world is our dome
In an era of progressive human being
Humanity is on the verge of extinct

[Charles Darnay]

Cool poem.

I don't know if you intended it this way, or if others see it, but I kind of got that "beat poetry" feeling from it.

One point of criticism if I may: the last line doesn't seem to work...both grammatically and in terms of content

[jon1jt]

i'm with charles. the last two lines need some fixing. i think society has exceeded being 'progressive' at this point of human history though. this is the global age. walk on any college campus today and say "globalization" and watch the masses cheer. just don't mention the word oligarchy. :)

[aashishameya]

thanks for suggestions, i will think of them