My 2nd Poem Ever

[random_hero]

The blue dusk descends,
smothering the day,
leaving stars behind.

I am 18 and have written 3 poems in my life that have really been serious attempts at this rather intimidating art form. The above poem is featured in the shared haiku game, and was wondering if it shows any promise. Thanks for your comments... :cool: :cool: :cool:

[Miranda]

RH i dont know a lot about poetry but I like this that you have written and think it does show promise. I like the idea of day being smothered - its light put out but the stars being left behind to shine. It's like one replacing the other, so there is always something shining - like hope in the darkness - despite the blue dusk.

You could look at it as if the blue dusk despite its purpose being to put out the daylight, actually brings something beautiful in its wake.




Originally posted by random_hero
The blue dusk descends,
smothering the day,
leaving stars behind.

I am 18 and have written 3 poems in my life that have really been serious attempts at this rather intimidating art form. The above poem is featured in the shared haiku game, and was wondering if it shows any promise. Thanks for your comments... :cool: :cool: :cool:

[random_hero]

Wow, I was really trying to convey that, but I wasnt sure if it came across. This whole poem thing is really not that bad once you get ud=sed to it.

[Suetang]

Hi random hero

Through your words I saw many beautiful images.

I am 41 and only began writing 3 years ago so I am a really late starter. I cannot explain why all of my poetry rhymes, but it just does and my writing 'just happened'. Now I find that I would be lost without it because it is such a big part of my life now.

It can be a difficult thing, to open up and share your innermost thoughts with strangers but it can also be very rewarding. I like your words and I encourage you to keep going.

Take care.........Sue

[random_hero]

I like the anonymity that comes with the screen name though. I could not share these poems with freinds, it would feel uncomfortable. But thank you, I am drawn to images, I am a visual person, and the challenges that come with effectively portraying those images thru word are fun to overcome.