Truth

[linz]

Before death,
the right hand and the left,
we were as flowers in the field.

How much shall we weigh
in the shallow grave
until we are once again?

The riddle of time
that never was
is now still under the rays;

But the day will come
calling back our cries
to the truth that's past away.

[Pendragon]

Structurally, it's sound. I just don't feel the poem. And don't allow that to discourage you. Not everyone understands mine either! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/Bond.gif

[hockeychick8792]

I like it don't listen to Pendragon. It felt the poem, I like it!

[hockeychick8792]

I enjoyed the Flower metaphor in the first stanza it is beautiful