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N. Lee Austin
06-01-2007, 12:20 AM
When The Towers Of Freedom Fall,
When The Fires Of Hell Burn,
When The Smoking Furls Of Death Enthralls,
A Frightened People Turn,
To Their Leader, To Their Country,
To Their Morals, To Their Lord,
To Find A Kind Of Answer,
To Hear A Healing Word...

When The Fires Have Been Extinquished
When The Choking Smoke Clears,
When The Rubble Has Been Swept Away,
When Love Has Dried The Tears,
A Proud Nation Shall Become,
A Nation Standing Tall,
Taller Than The Fallen Towers,
With Justice And Liberty For All! N. Lee Austin

N. Lee Austin
06-01-2007, 12:24 AM
I Would Like To Introduce My Self, N. Lee Austin, Number Ten Of Fifteen Children Raised In A Five Room House Built By Mama While Daddy Worked, Some May Have Thought Us Poor But We Were Very Rich In Encouragement To Dream, Catch The Dream Live The Dream. I Am An Author, Song Writer And Poet, Sometimes Opinionated. Thank You Nla

B-Mental
06-01-2007, 12:42 AM
Hi NLA, welcome to the forums. I hope you like it here. Frequently people post when they want comments on their poetry. I read your poem, and it has no feeling. I feel like I'm reading from an automaton. What you write about is a VERY emotional event. It ends with a cliche, and sort of just lack luster nationalism. It shows promise, but I think you can put so much more into this if you really want. Please don't be discouraged. I look forward to more.

N. Lee Austin
06-01-2007, 01:01 AM
Who Is B Mental, I Don't Like Somebody Else Putting Their Name On My Work, Whether You Like It Or Not It Better Get Removed!!!

B-Mental
06-01-2007, 01:06 AM
LOL, welcome to the forums...lighten up there mate! Cheers!

Logos
06-04-2007, 12:55 AM
N. Lee Austin, please familiarise yourself with public discussion forums.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Internet_forum

By responding to your topic, nobody 'puts their name' on your work, they're merely offering a response of welcome, feedback, and/or opinion.