SteveH
05-22-2007, 05:59 AM
Well, it rhymes and scans, which is a good start!
It's interesting, and has got something ( not sure what!)"do become one" is a bit awkward - the stresses are wrong, and the "do" is redundant.
Pendragon
05-22-2007, 09:16 AM
Nice. I like it. http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Bluebird.gif
Powered by vBulletin® Version 4.2.2 Copyright © 2026 vBulletin Solutions, Inc. All rights reserved.