cello poems

[Pendragon]

I liked the first one. http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/ThumbsUp.gif

[blp]

The full manuscript? You mean there's more?

I really really like loads of it, but it looks like it could do with a little pruning and sprucing up. Possibly, you could economise on the anger a bit. Not sure. Not really sure any of it needs to change, even if it's not perfect. I can't tell yet. Not sure the 9/11 one works.