Black Hung Hour - critique

[vhaney]

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[Pendragon]

Excellent! One thing: I would put in a break after the line "to bend upon my mind?" and divide the poem into two stanzas. This will prevent people from mistaking it for a poorly written sonnet, and recognize it as the gem it truly is!

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[blp]

very good. I especially like 'un appointed' rather than 'unappointed'.

[Countess]

Black does infect all it touches - figuratively and literally. Nicely done.