And for the inside

[lastwaterette]

Tonite you steal me away from reality because my eyes are closed to what I want to see and opened to what is called reality and hoping for what is called fantasy because it is so much easier than what is called repentance for your sins on the ground of a church while the unforgiving floor decides not to break your fall into the inferno that is your life.

[NSAM]

Thats powerful stuff

And i really like the way its set out almost as prose without punctuation.
it forces you to read it slowly and interpret your own breaks

[kiz_paws]

Nice ... I also found it very powerful.

Hope you plan to post more of your ideas, because your style is very unique. Also, WELCOME to LitNet! :)

[Pendragon]

I'll echo the powerful, although I will admit I'm a tad "old school" and just getting used to this type of poetry. http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/ThumbsUp.gif

[quasimodo1]

prose poetry, at last, and very good too. If you have more like that, post away. quasimodo1

[lastwaterette]

thanks you guys. I was really nervous about posting this, I've never really shared any of this with anyone! Everyone is so nice here though, I'm gonna post more soon!