Arise

[AZBOUND]

ARISE


To Walk A Mile In Ones Shoes,
Is To Have Felt That Persons Blues.

If You Feel The Need To Share,
Make Sure That You Have Already Been There.

If In Fact You’ve Felt Their Pain,
You Would Understand Their Strain.

If Your Backyard Was So Clean,
You Would Have The Right To Be That Mean.

So If You Feel The Need To Talk,
Open That Door, And Begin Your Walk.

If You Were Smart, You Would Know,
The Best Thing Would Be, To Let It Go.

So If You Understand This Rule,
You My Friend, Are No Fool.

If You Still Feel The Need To Poke,
You Are Nothing But A Total Joke.

Get A Life!![/b]

[Pendragon]

The style, something like a Ghazal, is not quite right. I think you sort of forced rhyme in a few places. This sort of poem really doesn't need rhymes as much as connectivity between lines. In Ghazal, the connections are vague, but still connect. Good effort, but try this one again…

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