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dyingflame
04-25-2007, 08:06 AM
I- Judgement

As they stand, he grimly sits:
lines scar the venerable face,
(Fifty years and half a decade had made his wig white.)
Bribes know nothing of him, his job his only delight,
his hammer usually brings silence, or a fight-

II- Innocent Until Proven Guilty

Yet there isn’t fear in this one’s silent gaze
but only soulless cold in his victim’s lines
as if the act of sin was now cradling its pain
and suckling fragile infant innocence, unfazed.

III- Trial, Jury and Sentence

The pure chains of justice cling
to his diabolical elegant flesh,
streams of salt rush round shrinking eyes,
blood blooms on the waxy weary cheeks-

He stands accused of murder, mad and wise,
a skull is already tattooed in his hollowed mind,
his biceps feels the cold teeth of the label flash.

Spitting out the truth of their request:
to hold no lies on their book but bear the cliffs
and hold the crashing waves aloof while he is bound
within the rooms of judgement, painted white,
and while Hercules sleeps his liver is pecked out.

alternative:

Spitting out the truth of their request:
to hold no lies on their book but bear the cliffs
and hold the crashing waves aloof while he is bound
within the rooms of judgement, painted white,
he dreams- but his Hercules still sleeps
while his liver is pecked out.

(which is more clear pls?)

IV- Waiting for Execution

Stripes now, and numbers, are the definition, not the night.

He thinks of old days where naked stumps of trees
huddled round together against cold; burned,
and regrets the cold emotion that soldiers felt, on their knees.

A long sloping road used to stretch out
While victims slept or sang, and the hammer rapped-

Sleep came over, the muscles stretched,
And the lock was banged up, holed-up,
Behind the stretch of electricity zapping
Waiting for that day
when he will reach forever to napping.

Pendragon
04-25-2007, 09:07 AM
One point: Prometheus, not Hercules had his liver eaten and it regrew to be eaten again. Poem is interesting! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/Appaluse.gif

dyingflame
04-27-2007, 05:07 AM
I know the myth but Hercules kills the crow that eats Prometheus' liver every night doesn't he? Perhaps it is not clear in the poem; it not Hercules that has his liver pecked out- it is the the condemned who like Prometheus is "the bound" but still hopes in freedom (he is innocent.) But his Hercules remains asleep, nobody saves him and he is executed in vain. the image of "Hercules sleeping" stands for the injustice of the system (there is also an ironic echo of this in the name of part 2 "innocent until proven guilty" which is a basic concept of our justice system which I question) Perhaps you misunderstood because I wasn't clear enough in the poem; this idea came quite late in the poem's writing in fact. I'll see what i can do

dyingflame
04-30-2007, 04:00 PM
Mountains of Fire

(A) Combustion

The glass shielded their naked backs
from the howling crevices and wolves
lingering in the depths of their minds-

As the gears shifted position,
the chassis creaked and jolted-groaned,
the side mirror sheen glazed over,
the silencer turned on into a growling murmur
heard across valleys, not lost in their fervour.

A hand had claimed the prize- pink and white,
plucked out like bone and armoured night-
an ivory tower rose in the distance,
hugged by two hills that moved ever closer.

(B) Warmth

But she can be fickle as ice and lies,
or warm as the bread baked in her oven
each morning while the lockets tumbled down,
and knew her only love was the art of lover-sighs.

She was always made of clay
as mountains are made of stone-
an impressionable statue of velvet,
black satin and dark bloody wine
no longer rushing light or fine,
but with rhythm jagged of love,
not stopped by winter, nor when
summer whitely comes tumbling-gurgling
as had she who saw the longest day.

Her laughs were cold, as were her feet
the pebbles snuggled and crashed beneath,
the falls that grinded metal to fine red dust
the weight of the flashing folly based seed.

(C) Eruption

Imposingly, she caught herself
on a spear of sins and turned
the moment where gasps ended

in her dizzying stare.
and pumped their blood-
caught eyes
and tendons
screamed
and grew
and clawed them out
and felt
the dampness grow
as her corset leather flew
firmly
and meaty cannons blew
swirled like the milky way
and out of rosy towers,
thunderous waterfalls flew,
drowned her thighs and nipples
and breaths that fogged
in mist the blood that
dropped on one’s
nice dead geranium.

She snarled while in the heat,
snarled like their small oil drenched fire
in its sticks, dried and rough
gulping dry leaves, crackling tales
of fanged serpentine swallows,
of her hair that clung in crimson
jagged wet strands around their throats
and drank the air out of their mouth.

(D) Aftermath

Later, she was seen at the petrol station,
dancing in the husky night of open centres,
to the sounds of beating pistol drums,
a whirlwind of echoes flying in sparks of flames
pentagrams etched into the carved-out names
of broken lovers by their ghosts.

I too once treaded with her the paved giant roads,
Mobility and sound were my allure-
Now, over the same black cloud I hover,
Beneath earth, a thin scar feigning death-
and mount Olympia crumbles slower
in the combustion dreams she never met.