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xosweetyxo33
04-19-2007, 05:57 PM
oh hi im reading this book called Bridge to terabithia and the main character is Jesse Aarons and we have to write about his new values throughout the stories he's beliefs strengths he finds in himself and anuther person in the book and lessons he learns in the book and who he learns the from so if u could please check my assignment it would be a big help below is my assignment:idea: :

Bridge to Terabithia Writing Assignment



In Bridge to Terabithia Jesse Aarons learns numerous lessons from Leslie Burke. Jess learns to live life to open to possibilities. He learns to always look on the bright side of things, to live life to the fullest and that the world is a jungle just waiting to be explored. From Leslie he is taught not to care what people think of you, it’s what you think of yourself that counts. Without Leslie teaching him these valuable lessons he wouldn’t have learned to cherish chances he may have in life.



Jesse finds all different types of strengths in himself and other people. Throughout the book Jesse starts to learn he can be brave sometimes, is imaginative and creative. He learns he is a loyal friend, loving and thoughtful. He finds that Leslie’s strengths are to be courageous and adventurous. Leslie was smart, very creative, an optimist, and determined.



One value Jesse develops towards the end of the story is his family. He comes to treasure the friendship he had with Leslie, and May Belle. From these things he favors he learns that there are no second chances to life so he might as well make the best of it now. At the end of the book Jess comes to believe Terabithia is a place where he can be himself. He also learns that by preserving Terabithia, he would always have a part of Leslie with him.

Shalot
04-19-2007, 06:07 PM
I've never read the book, but I am judging your essay on sentence structure alone, and the following sentence doesn't sit well with me:


One value Jesse develops towards the end of the story is his family

It would be better to say something like "Toward the end of the story, Jesse begins to value his family."

Here's why: Jesse's family is not a value and that sentence says that his family is a value (I mean, yes there are family values, which is some overused phrase, but that's not what this essay is about, is it?).

But, Jesse does begin to value his family, or maybe he begins to appreciate them, or he realizes how important is family is to him.

xosweetyxo33
04-19-2007, 06:12 PM
thank you

read_aloud07
05-05-2007, 12:26 AM
I don't know if I'm too late to help, but I would suggest adding some quotes and specific examples from the book of how Jesse learns these new values.