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markymark
04-13-2007, 12:57 PM
Read this poem I wrote and tell me what you think

by Markymark

Apostrophe to Carelessness

Time has gone by or so it seems
The days of worrying have soon past
It is almost time to follow our dreams
The things we've learned will always last
Memories made, they went so fast
The stupid choices we've made, again and again
The time spent together was such a blast
When I'll ever see you only god knows when,
But if fate brings us together see you in 10.

Now time has come to start our new life
We're the same old people, but something is new
Some now readily married, husband and wife
Suddenly careers, important jobs to do
Stuck with those decisions we didn't think through
Others of us will travel the world, far off places
The kids we once wanted have now all grew
No longer careless teens, but same ol' smilin faces
Now all grown up, its reality our heart embraces.

dramasnot6
04-16-2007, 07:14 AM
I really enjoyed this poem. It was slightly cliche at times, but made for a comforting and very approachable read.
You might want to color it up a bit with some stronger use of imagery and language. Perhaps a nice metaphor for life or age would set the poem apart a bit more :)
Well done!