Summer dreams

[EDELWEISS]

Glimpses of another world;
Where even the subtle nuances of life glimmer with clandestine hope;
Argyle pink,azure and deep wine;
Splashed on my palette;
My strokes bold somewhere
Yet feather light to some dimensions;
Straying at frayed ends
Then ravishing the canvas again
In a bold silver epoch.

Tell me what u think of this?

[dramasnot6]

Interesting imagery. phrases like "clandestine hope" and "bold silver epoch" make it very unique.

[Pendragon]

Like Drama, I find the imagry facinating! Can you split that lone long line? It unbalances the poem. This is my sugesstion, ignore or take it as you will, the poem is yours, and a good one!

Thus:
Where even the subtle nuances of life
All a-glimmer with clandestine hope;

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[EDELWEISS]

Thx for the suggestion. I'm definitely going to take it. I'm not really good at poetry. Just find my spirit soaring at times, taking me to a higher plane. I feel delicious in those moments of bliss, feel like I have to pen down those emotions.