Writer Under Construction

[EDELWEISS]

I'm just a beginner and I really need some feedback. I' m willing to work at my writing. Hoping for some constructive criticism.

It's a timeless dream bathed in an ecstatic tide.
Where lush evergreen sways ever so gently:
Where dew drops grace the flowers in a prismatic slush.
Did winds ever get so biased as they are today?
Caressing me with such love lorn grace.
Bliss! Did you not gather envy when you wrapped me in your ethereal mist?

Hush says my heart,
Hush your darting glance and whisper,
Hush your thwarting praise;
Hush and let your eyes rest over this valley of enchanting glades.
Hopes and wishes here rest sublime like close and cloistered grapes.
Fruit of mystery, love and grace yet humble with the joys of May.
Crested in its royal maze, bursting with the sweetest glaze;
Vanity aren't you thus deprived with contents so sweet and pure.

So stay here and rest your wandering eyes on sights of glory borne in May.
Where spring it lasts for ages dear and rainbows never fade in grey;
Here in this pure dawn of ethereal mists,
Here in this glorious May,
I've found, i've found my home so dear;
My shaded grove in its sweetest enchanting maze.