Since other people are posting theirs...

[Adolescent09]

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[Virgil]

I didn't read it in the contest thread Adol, but now that I read, I find it good. I really like this stanza best;

brown faced sweetness, cocked far left,
in bows of greatness,
in motley's twists,
in oily skins to mark saints' meekness,
in gracious flow.....
The rest is ok, but it seems a bit forced. I guess that's how it goes with contests. But this stanza seems inspired.

[jon1jt]

you found a nice rhythm in this one, overall. i agree with virgil about the strain, which may be from the rhyme because when you break away from it the poem flows naturally.

nice work.

[Adolescent09]

Thanks you two, I'll work harder on my flow and consistency in style.