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stephofthenight
04-06-2007, 08:21 PM
silly boy...
why don't boys understand
that when a girl offers her hand
she knows that he is the one
and that she will do anything to be his
every kiss means the world
everyday is a whirl
when she is in his arms
with his trust in him, he has to keep her from harm
so silly boy why cant you see
that your everything she wants you to be
silly boy don't you understand
that she wants to be so much more than friends
she doesn't see you as just another boy
who will play with her heart like a toy
she puts her trust in you
stupid boy...
you broke her heart and it isn't even yours
she tries to hide her tears, yet they just pour
she wants to be everything to you
but she would settle to be anything with you
silly boy don't you see what your doing to her
cant you see in her eyes that its you she wants
open your eyes look past the surface
and know that your face haunts her thoughts
because silly boy...she loves you

my beautiful star

my soul is darker then night
every kiss is another star
lighting my world
shining so bright
dont go away
dont wonder to far
know that i will always love you
i hope you will be my everything
your name is a whisper
that escapes my lips every day
just let me be anything i can
dont think about our friends
i pray you can let me be the one
the one to hold your hand
but when all is said and done
i know the time will come
and ill lie and say i understand
ill walk away like its any other day
knowing i trusted you with my love
and you threw it away...

Be my star
my beautiful star
can i be your sky
can i hold you forever
will you be the light in my life
when its dark outside
your kiss will guide me
when life is bland
your kiss excites me
when i want to give up
your kiss reminds me
that this is life
and its full of strife
but i shouldnt worry
ill be here forever
if only we where together
and you would be my star.

emily
im so stupid
for loving you
my heart you hid
when we where thru
you threw my love back at me
like speeding bullets my trust it blew
but you taught me a lesson of life
that love is hell
and with hell im thru.

listen
im trying to tell you
that my love is true
but you wont listen to me
your way to in love
with your girlfiend to be
but if you would listen
you would know that your to good for her
i try to tell you
i get shut out until i cant bare
you continue to cause me pain
my bloody tears stain
but you dont care
you just walk away
without a tear in your eye
leaving me there
to fufill my promise
without you to love i promise to die...

why
why wont you love me
why cant we be
that beautiful couple
from our memory
i know we had fights
but who doesnt
i just want you to know
that a mistake it wasnt
i still love you
yet i know we are thru
but why cant we be
that picture perfect couple
or will it always be
just another memory...

please let me know what u think about these

blp
04-07-2007, 01:44 PM
It strikes me that your approach to seeking opinions on your work may be the same thing that's causing problem in your relationships – pleading. If you want too much from people, you'll scare them off!

As far as the work itself goes, I'm afraid it's full of clichés and bad grammar.

Bakiryu
04-07-2007, 06:52 PM
I like the ideas in your poems, but they would be better if estructured into verses (just a thought).

genoveva
04-09-2007, 03:05 AM
your name is a whisper
that escapes my lips every day


I love these lines!