Wake

[toni]

Wake


History’s phantom uncoiled;
Unpleasant memories, unfold.
Sheds a candle, lights a tear,
Stiches eyelids.
The phantom, she follows;
Knelt upon the ground in sorrow.
Died, grieving in lonely meadow,
And waits, bitterly for tomorrow



Comments and suggestions are very much welcome:)

[hyperinsomnia]

A cadle? I like the use of commas and semi colins which i'm very fussy about. Aesthetically pleasing.

[toni]

oh the horror, the horror! I meant "candle" not cadle. Deepest apologies. :blush: I'm not sure if I used the semi-colons correctly, though.

[dramasnot6]

Wake


History’s phantom uncoiled;
Unpleasant memories, unfold.
Sheds a candle, lights a tear,
Stiches eyelids.
The phantom, she follows;
Knelt upon the ground in sorrow.
Died, grieving in lonely meadow,
And waits, bitterly for tomorrow



Comments and suggestions are very much welcome:)

Beautiful imagery toni. I especially loved "wait, bitterly for tomorrow" and "grieving in lonely meadow". It is so poignant and delicate, well done m'dear Alien Poet! :D :thumbs_up

[toni]

Wow, many thanks, Dearie alien sister! :banana: :banana:

[blp]

Stitches, fyi.

[toni]

Stitches, fyi.

Sorry.:blush: I am dyslexic.:blush: