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Adolescent09
03-09-2007, 07:08 PM
Good Night

Pit pat, Pit pat,
Little cat feet,
on dainty cushion
aimless prowl,
cloud and dust down the street,

pit pat, pit pat,
translucent beat,
in soily crop,
in Martin Avenue,
on Chicago's steeple peak

pit pat, pit pat,
little words
little meaning

just the little sound it makes
when I'm patting you to sleep.

Virgil
03-10-2007, 10:26 AM
Good Night

Pit pat, Pit pat,
Little cat feet,
on dainty cushion
aimless prowl,
cloud and dust down the street,

pit pat, pit pat,
translucent beat,
in soily crop,
in Martin Avenue,
on Chicago's steeple peak

pit pat, pit pat,
little words
little meaning

just the little sound it makes
when I'm patting you to sleep.

I like this a lot adolescent. Beautiful the way it shifts location and then shifts back to the bed. And I like the gentle affection it projects without getting syrupy. Nice poem. :)

hockeychick8792
03-10-2007, 01:30 PM
Wow! I enjoyed this poem a lot! Its simple, yet powerful!