Afraa
02-13-2007, 07:54 AM
Hello everyone!
This is one of the poems I've written some times ago. I would like to know what do you think about it and whether it is good or not; or does it need some corrections or editing.
It sounds religious but the fact is it is not. It is about (death), indeed. I wrote this poem after the death of one of my relatives.
The Will of Divine
He who comes
Striking strongly
Or taking smoothly
The chosen wicked
Or the right one
Depriving both,
Or any or many,
From all living.
He is the one:
The destroyer of pleasure,
The rage of tumult weather,
The suck to deep darkness
Away from the golden sun.
The incurable disease
Without "Wait, please!"
The moment has come!
No dilation of time.
The tense is prime,
The chest in struggle,
The throat can't giggle,
The eyes close and gaze,
The tongue utters a phrase:
This is the only will
No one dare to defy!
By Afraa
This is one of the poems I've written some times ago. I would like to know what do you think about it and whether it is good or not; or does it need some corrections or editing.
It sounds religious but the fact is it is not. It is about (death), indeed. I wrote this poem after the death of one of my relatives.
The Will of Divine
He who comes
Striking strongly
Or taking smoothly
The chosen wicked
Or the right one
Depriving both,
Or any or many,
From all living.
He is the one:
The destroyer of pleasure,
The rage of tumult weather,
The suck to deep darkness
Away from the golden sun.
The incurable disease
Without "Wait, please!"
The moment has come!
No dilation of time.
The tense is prime,
The chest in struggle,
The throat can't giggle,
The eyes close and gaze,
The tongue utters a phrase:
This is the only will
No one dare to defy!
By Afraa