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bfallers_30
02-07-2007, 07:52 PM
I am currently writing a two page paper for my english class, and I am stuck at the end of page one. The topic of the paper is that we had to take a photo of ourselves from our past and compare it to who we are now. I chose a photo of me and my father(who has passed) . I was the age of two...ahahasdjljalskdjf.. I need help...here is what i have thus far.


Photo Memoir
My family was your everyday average “Leave it to Beaver”, replica. A Loving parents with a father who went to work everyday while mother stayed home with the children. What America would call the perfect family? In all actuality, my family was far from what America would call perfect.
Growing up I always knew the man I called my dad wasn’t my biological father. My older brother’s and sister made sure I never thought otherwise. My mother had been divorced and re-married a few times which caused us to move around quite a bit. No matter where we went, I always had the same picture at my bedside, a sort of security I guess you could say. That picture was of my father and I, taken the day before he passed away. My father had re-married as well before he passed away. The photo was taken by his new wife, my stepmother.
In this photo I was two years old; just four months shy of my third birthday. I had not yet attended my first day of school, and gotten my first boyfriend on the bus ride home. I had not yet learned how to play the piano, or gotten the lead role as little red riding hood in my fourth grade play. When this photo was taken I had not yet become a young woman.
I had no idea that my life you be so difficult or as wonderful as it has been so far. That moment in time when the photo was taken, I had yet to experience life. To experience love, and heartbreak almost unbearable at times.

bfallers_30
02-07-2007, 08:01 PM
I am currently writing a two page paper for my english class, and I am stuck at the end of page one. The topic of the paper is that we had to take a photo of ourselves from our past and compare it to who we are now. I chose a photo of me and my father(who has passed) . I was the age of two...ahahasdjljalskdjf.. I need help...here is what i have thus far.


Photo Memoir
My family was your everyday average “Leave it to Beaver”, replica. A Loving parents with a father who went to work everyday while mother stayed home with the children. What America would call the perfect family? In all actuality, my family was far from what America would call perfect.
Growing up I always knew the man I called my dad wasn’t my biological father. My older brother’s and sister made sure I never thought otherwise. My mother had been divorced and re-married a few times which caused us to move around quite a bit. No matter where we went, I always had the same picture at my bedside, a sort of security I guess you could say. That picture was of my father and I, taken the day before he passed away. My father had re-married as well before he passed away. The photo was taken by his new wife, my stepmother.
In this photo I was two years old; just four months shy of my third birthday. I had not yet attended my first day of school, and gotten my first boyfriend on the bus ride home. I had not yet learned how to play the piano, or gotten the lead role as little red riding hood in my fourth grade play. When this photo was taken I had not yet become a young woman.
I had no idea that my life you be so difficult or as wonderful as it has been so far. That moment in time when the photo was taken, I had yet to experience life. To experience love, and heartbreak almost unbearable at times.

It might not be at the level of majority of your usual readings, but please I am in desperate need of any advice or help I can get.

kilted exile
02-07-2007, 08:01 PM
You've got your opening and you have introduced your idea that you have now experienced these things, the next step to me would be to describe what it feels like to experience these things.

seasong
02-07-2007, 08:04 PM
You've got your opening and you have introduced your idea that you have now experienced these things, the next step to me would be to describe what it feels like to experience these things.

and tie those experiences back into how it felt having your father miss out on that. Just weave him through the paper and it will give it a sense of unity.

bfallers_30
02-07-2007, 08:13 PM
These are all great advice, and I will use it. But I am supposed to tie it all into that photo. As who I was then...to who i am now..I am sooooo lost.

kilted exile
02-07-2007, 08:21 PM
Once you are finished describing how it feels to experience what you already say you've experienced, and tie it back into what your father missed - as seasong suggested - you will be quite close to having the essay completed, with regards to who you were then compared to now; this is a personal essay & that is something only you can answer. Just think about how losing your father at an early age shaped your beliefs.

Domer121
02-07-2007, 10:54 PM
To add onto what kilted exile said I would suggest that you not only take the pain/loss you have experienced, but how it has made you grow and tie into the fact that you are somewhat the same person that you were, in the picture, just wiser and stronger...I would try to end it on that note, I know that whenever I write a paper I try to end it on a somewhat gripping sentence...Good Luck

byquist
02-15-2007, 04:27 PM
You might get a paragraph out of a "What if?" -- what if this father had lived longer and was alive today? How would it have affected my upbringing? Would he have been supportive? How would he be important to me today? etc.