Rhapsody in D Minor

[Ravenwolfvoyage]

Steps taken with a heavy heart weighing down my ascendance
Dripping rain ever lastingly to the cadence of my tears penance
A Nightingale sings vacant riddles within my hearts scripture
By the melodic echo’s of words hearkened in yesterday’s literature

It is without flight that these wings laid burrow within the cavity
For love bringeth a fruit that lay waste upon its plate of gravity
It is the hearkening voice within that lay foundations to rubble
And my inner eye that does not heed to the transposing trouble

Harkened to the tinkering douse of majestic psalm
Lay vacant into my troubled heart that feels wrong
Extinguish the key of the piano chords ascending light
In a farewell prelude to my hearts bidding flight

Transparent and transposing in the cold evening fall air
Carryeth a voice that leadeth only to my fallen despair
A creeping Dutchman vine lay way to my hearts path
That bringeth me to the dew leaves of the charnel’s wrath

[Dyrwen]

Damn.. that was deep ****. Heh, fine work there. Rarely see long stanzas like that.

[Ravenwolfvoyage]

Thanks Drywen, I appreciate the awesome comment. I'm going to take a gamble though and try some Poe!!! You are pretty straight yourself, I enjoyed your writes!

[Polydeuces]

Excellent!

Finally some real, strong poetry on this forum - and how?

With complements from the publisher, I would say.

Perform this some time!

I (also known as Bartholomeus Bloom) will not resume my analysing comments right now: this is absolutely not necessary.

Best,
Bart

ps. One thing, though: can you please elaborate on the "Dutch Vine"? Or would this be too personal?

[Ravenwolfvoyage]

Well in the end I was being possibly a little too morbid. The poem did a twist on its own at the end. Charnel means the same thing as a grave and the Dutchman Vine has a distinguishing characteristic. One curious attribute of the flowers is that they give off an aroma reminiscent of rotting meat. Here is a link to that kind of vine, really interesting!!! http://www.microscopyu.com/galleries/confocal/dutchmanspipestem.html

I hate to give away the story but it is a lover in search of a lost love. The lost lover is in the form of a ghost and the one lover follows the ghost to the charnel where the lover is made aware of the lost lovers fate.

I really appreciate the compliment!!! That was too awesome, thank you!!!

-Ravenwolfvoyager