A Poem (I was told not to hold back, so here it is)

[Arania]

Upon reviewing my poetry, people have told me not to hold back. I didn't know that I was, but now that I look at it I suppose they were correct. This was me doing everything but holding back. It needs refining. It might just be terrible, I'm not sure.



slipping into numbness?



my heart is in shards on this
ceiling-tiled floor
and i am amazed that you do not
stoop from your high-tower pedestal
to pick them up this time.

i loved you then and i love you now
and i will love you tomorrow but
the glass pinches harder now
on the sensitive parts of my being
from which i can not (even narrowly) escape!



about this love (so they call it) --
i am tired. i have scrubbed myself clean,
clinging as a refugee to the silk sheets of reform for leftovers
of this love that is now devouring all that remains.



you saw me here from the beginning,
you knew me so well, and i need you again
(in the strongest sense)
to suck out this knowledge from my skin
like the vampire of my very core that you are.

i have murderously squeezed out everything
for you and i am dry of myself, still pushing
air from my soul -- holding breath
until you return. you must return because
i am running out of ways, you see, to feel the void.




© By ElenaChavela On 1/18/2007 1:12:14 AM

[Pendragon]

Nice poem! Do not hold back, ever. The world would loose a poet! ;)

[Triskele]

i love it, an intensity of emotion that denotes true poetry, well played

[brokenheartpoet]

That is a great poem , please do not hold back our others will not be able to learn for such a great poet. Thanks,for the poem

[That Guy]

Wow. You sure didn't hold back this time. I could really feel the powerful desperation. I also loved how you compared waiting for a loved ones return to sufficating, waiting to breath yet no air is there to fill them up anymore. Amazing work!