Adolescent09
01-10-2007, 07:06 PM
I wrote this for an SAT assignment.. I have not recieved the scored yet but I would be greatful if someone could rate it on a scale of 1-5. I don't think I ended it very well but tell me what you think... The topic is present a thought provoking opinion based on self experience, current events... etc.."The greatest griefs are those we cause ourselves" I wrote it to break my writer's block but I don't think I was very successful:
The topic presented; "The greatest griefs are those we cause ourselves", is subject to diverse opinion based on the grounds of personal experience or observation. More or less we can deduce that the objective of grief is placed on a wide scale from circumstances to initial motives. The latter grief is unprecedented and seemingly dire but does no pose as an excuse for lack of self initiate. For example, people who are born into poverty and crime predominated thoroughfares may be grief stricken due to natural circumstances. Grief, although a nifty excuse to fall back on and express as an epitome of one's predicaments, might have been justified in the past but not today. Certain restrictions and mandates of the past, mostly limiting the freedoms of women, Jews, blacks and others of diverse ethnicity made it potentially impossible to increase social status. But today in superpower democratic nations which have put an end to theologian ostracism, racial segregation and sexism, virtually anything is possible depending on the will and self initiative of the being. Another circumstance of grief is death, but in most cases people accept the fact that life goes on. Grievance of death fluctuates greatly depending on the being's will power. For instance, many more people are liable to grieve over the consequential demise of a child than the natural demise of a 90-year old heat patient. Grief may be a reoccurring aberration of retrospect, where the being has experienced a poor childhood life or witnessed inconventional death at a very young age. This reoccurring
grief usually culminates in depression or inability to restore one's mind to the present from distant sorrowful thoughts. Whatever the case, grief is either intentionally imposed or circumstance intervenes and proliferates grief on its own accord.
In most circumstances which result in grief, we are the ones who inflict it upon ourselves.
The topic presented; "The greatest griefs are those we cause ourselves", is subject to diverse opinion based on the grounds of personal experience or observation. More or less we can deduce that the objective of grief is placed on a wide scale from circumstances to initial motives. The latter grief is unprecedented and seemingly dire but does no pose as an excuse for lack of self initiate. For example, people who are born into poverty and crime predominated thoroughfares may be grief stricken due to natural circumstances. Grief, although a nifty excuse to fall back on and express as an epitome of one's predicaments, might have been justified in the past but not today. Certain restrictions and mandates of the past, mostly limiting the freedoms of women, Jews, blacks and others of diverse ethnicity made it potentially impossible to increase social status. But today in superpower democratic nations which have put an end to theologian ostracism, racial segregation and sexism, virtually anything is possible depending on the will and self initiative of the being. Another circumstance of grief is death, but in most cases people accept the fact that life goes on. Grievance of death fluctuates greatly depending on the being's will power. For instance, many more people are liable to grieve over the consequential demise of a child than the natural demise of a 90-year old heat patient. Grief may be a reoccurring aberration of retrospect, where the being has experienced a poor childhood life or witnessed inconventional death at a very young age. This reoccurring
grief usually culminates in depression or inability to restore one's mind to the present from distant sorrowful thoughts. Whatever the case, grief is either intentionally imposed or circumstance intervenes and proliferates grief on its own accord.
In most circumstances which result in grief, we are the ones who inflict it upon ourselves.