A Sight of Sleepiness

[Matsiah]

Just wrote this for a 'last of the day as I pry myself away' post. Hope over-passers enjoy all observations. Also, repercussions of any nature are welcomed when written.

First covering is eyes,
Rolling dry bearings,
No staring is droop,
Thick stoop stature,
Flicker quicker dark one,
Of flashy quick run,
Sun brims birds,
Similar Gizzards,
Tum' o Lizards,
That is flying flash,

Next is covering drives,
Lives hermit,
Too similar,
Lazy action,
Blast through it,
Simply dissinigrate,
Fuels irate,
Other,
Reluctance,
Slow mow,
Gaze low,
Across Scope,
Sticky Gyration,
Grip Slip,
Grinding around,
Miss-minding Ground,

Last to cover abrasions; Ability 'o consultations,
Lump Up,
Back buoyant particulars,
Inflating particles,
Gash last,
G's passed,
Mind exchange,
Indifferently Observant,
Flair fervent,
Visible casts from invisible blasts,
Utterly Extrasensory?

[Matsiah]

This poem - pertaining to my currently fatigued status - was pleasing when my eyes scanned over the final product. Not sure of the acceptance levels, though, I feel achieved by the simplicity I used to describe seemingly complex sensations. Not bad for writing while fighting all thy describing; however, I suppose a persons best hope to describe sensations is going to occur while experiencing the indicated, or stated, symptoms.

[Triskele]

no, i disagree, i think that much of the better emotional/situaltional poetry is reflective upon the past, not on the present...

[Matsiah]

Actually, your probably right. I wasn't actually speaking of poetry; more along the lines of physical sensation. Anyway... thanks.