making mistakes

[lukin]

Pinch

My eccentricities make it tough
For someone to bear, how will I love?
I can’t comprehend, I won’t understand!
Let slip of all possibilities… drowned

I’m stood above this waterfall: my life
Water being powerfully sedate: my life

Pinch my skin I can’t bleed
Pull my hair I won’t feel a thing
A shoal of worries weighing me down
My blanket of desire left to seep through the ground

I’m stood above this waterfall: my life
Water being powerfully sedate,
My life gushes over the edge
No time to waste and no second-guess

Everyday the same stale choices
End with the same damn answers
A barrelful of regret: everything’s set
With everything set I’ve reached the waterfall edge

[lukin]

it'll be nice if someone can relate, but i guess we'll have to wait and see...

[Koa]

I like it, I like the way it flows... Not sure I can understand it in depth, but I like the first two lines... eccentricities can really make it hard...

(sorry about being fussy but I have a thing for grammar and this is getting me confused: is 'I'm stood' correct???)

[lukin]

thanks
yeah i guess "i'm stood" isn't perfect grammer,
"i've stood", maybe,
or just "...stood"
as you said it just "flowed"

[Ravenwolfvoyage]

Wow I can relate to that write, you did an awesome job. The sad thing is that even when you get 40 most of your problems seems to be repeats of the same problems you had when you were 20. After awhile you tell life, wow I am in shock I didn't see that coming! You did a fine job, it was natural and you didn't mask the way you feel when confronting troubles.

[lukin]

wow, that's such a compliment thankyou very much!
it's amazing- i posted this a while back now,and i didn't think anyone looked at it- but seeing that reply is awesome so thankyou very much. it seems that as i'm only 18, i've got a hell of a lot of repetitions to go through eh? ah well, c'est la vie mes amies fantastiques!