The Dancer

[JackShea]

In sleep she comes and,
Whispers in my ear,
'Once we were one,
Once I held you dear.'
The Dancer of my dreams
The Diva of destinies.
Seducer of lost youth and,
Distant memories.

She lays herself between us
Between my love and I.
She tempts me with her charms
Entrances me with a sigh.
I beg and plead for her to fly, please!
Those days are long gone by.
She mocks me with her laughter
As she gently caresses my thigh.

The sun rises to the setting moon and asks,
'What's above in the skies?
Why it's the Dancer and the Dreamer.'
Says the moon-
'And twinkling stars and lies.'

[Whifflingpin]

Very neat. Tastes good.

I like the structure, the delicate use of rhyme -
the imagery
the nostalgia
the sensuality
the hint of guilt - just a hint, or maybe.... I'll have to think about that

Thanks

[Triskele]

hey

definitely like it, almost as if the dancer begins as your love, but then guilt reminds you of your love and how the dancer is trying to separate you from her

[Dr Eep]

I like it Jack!! Fantastic!!
I love the ending;
"The sun rises to the setting moon and asks,
'What's above in the skies?
Why it's the Dancer and the Dreamer.'
Says the moon-
'And twinkling stars and lies.'"

I love that kind of celestial conversation going on there and the symbolism works perfectly!!

[Arania]

I like this too. It is very well thought out, and it took me a few reads to really appreciate it.

"The sun rises to the setting moon and asks.
'What's above in the skies?'

I would have never thought about that. That is beautiful. That makes me wish I was an actual poet.