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Gokhan
12-31-2006, 04:39 PM
Helios

At the days of rage
I go by the fisherman
We talk of the fish
And the sea
And how the fish
Viciously strike at the sea
With rage
But be brought by the
Waves to the shore
Dead
I stare at the sea.
The fisherman says:

“Looking at the clouds
Seeing the sun behind
But not seeing
The helios in mind
Come close!
See the helios in mind
And the helios in heart
Be the feel of all
And the feel of none
Let the truth shine
And see
The helios in mind”

At the days of love
I go by the fisherman
We look at the moonlight
And at the sea
And how the moonlight
Dances with the sea
With love
But be gone by the
Morning to their homes
Alone
I stare at the sea.
The fisherman says:

“Looking at the clouds
Seeing the sun behind
But not seeing
The helios in mind
Come close!
See the helios in mind
And the helios in heart
Be the feel of all
And the feel of none
Let the truth shine
And see
The helios in mind”

At the days of pain
I go by the fisherman
We watch the nets
And the sea
And how the nets
Chain the sea
With pain
But be taken by the
Hands that feel
Useless
I stare at the sea.
The fisherman says:

“Looking at the clouds
Seeing the sun behind
But not seeing
The helios in mind
Come close!
See the helios in mind
And the helios in heart
Be the feel of all
And the feel of none
Let the truth shine
And see
The helios in mind”

At the days of joy
I go by the fisherman
We laugh at the children
And at the sea
And how the children
Dive into the sea
With joy
But be thrown by the
Currents at a distance
Far away
I stare at the sea.
The fisherman says:

“Looking at the clouds
Seeing the sun behind
But not seeing
The helios in mind
Come close!
See the helios in mind
And the helios in heart
Be the feel of all
And the feel of none
Let the truth shine
And see
The helios in mind”

I now see
That the waves of sea
And the moonlight of sea
And the nets of sea
And the children of sea
Are the rage of days
And the love of days
And the pain of days
And the joy of days
That the fisherman
In my heart
Is the helios in mind

Gokhan
01-01-2007, 05:52 PM
I would be very happy to read comments that are written especially on this poem of mine. I thank in advance to those who give their time to read my poem.

dramasnot6
01-01-2007, 07:46 PM
I like it. Nice use of structure and repetition, the end may be a bit weak though,perhaps consider a bit of a metaphor? Well done! :D

Triskele
01-01-2007, 08:02 PM
i agree with dram... i like the feeling of simple joy i get from the poem