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[Dark_Fire]

When I'm with you,
eternity is a step away,
my love continues to grow,
with each passing day.

This treasure of love,
I cherish within my soul,
how much I love you...
you'll never really know.

You bring a joy to my heart,
I've never felt before,
with each touch of your hand,
I love you more and more.

Whenever we say goodbye,
whenever we part,
know I hold you dearly,
deep inside my heart.

So these seven words,
I pray you hold true,
"Forever And Always,
I Will Love You."

[Poetess]

really romantic.

i`m not being rude, but IMO (In My Opinion) :

When I'm with you,
eternity is a miles away, (or maybe FAR away)
my love continues to grow,
with each passing day.


"You bring joy to my heart," Instead of "You bring a joy to my heart" maybe it`s better


Or else, it`s really up to you, but yes I liked it

[Laindessiel]

Yes, very touching.

Poetess, don't you think that Dark Fire is referring to this line eternity is a step away as him feeling that "forever" will not take too long and far from him to reach because he's with the girl? So I reckon the word step is appropriate for this line.

Rhyming have always endeared me so that's bonus points! :)

[Poetess]

Then I got it wrong.
I took in the way lovers feel the end is far away, so their love lasts
I took eternity as the end, and being a step away is being near.. This is how I got it

[Laindessiel]

Ah. Ofcourse, interpretations are confusing. :D