im in love with a girl

[godhands]

im in love with a girl, she likes poetry very much, she asked me to write a poem about love, i dont know much , im not well versed can anybody help me with a well written poem about love.

[Eufrosyne]

Maybe she'd apprecciate it more if it really comes from you and what you think. Mostly the thought behind the poem is what really counts, what makes it beautiful, not if it's well written. Good luck!

[Laindessiel]

Start, though, with images of you and the girl.
Then tell her (through the poem) why you love her. Why she is so endearing to you, what is it of her that you really find charming, and WHY YOU FELL IN LOVE WITH HER. (I can't put words to your paper because I don't know exactly how you feel.)

The important thing is is that it should be clear to you why and how you have feelings for this girl, and then take these emotions from your heart and put it to words. Pull out the love, the thoughts, the strong emotions from you. And then your heart will teach you how to write. Like what Eurofryne said, as long as you're sincere, and as long as it comes from within you, you won't have any problems.

Good luck, buddy!! :thumbs_up :thumbs_up

PM me how it goes! :)

[Virgil]

im in love with a girl, she likes poetry very much, she asked me to write a poem about love, i dont know much , im not well versed can anybody help me with a well written poem about love.

You can do what Unnamable did and put together some love poems by poets into a book. Here read this thread:
http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=16186.

I believe he was successful.

BTW, perhaps I'm the only one, but I miss Unnamable. I know we didn't always get along, but he was a character. ;)

[Riesa]

BTW, perhaps I'm the only one, but I miss Unnamable. I know we didn't always get along, but he was a character. ;)

he was, huh virg. I miss him too. it's such a shame this forum aint big enough for everyone. :(

[Laindessiel]

Whom did you woo, Uncle Virg? Surely your lovey dovey wife? ;)

A'right!!!

[Virgil]

Whom did you woo, Uncle Virg? Surely your lovey dovey wife? ;)

A'right!!!

No I wasn't wooing. It was a member, his lit net name was Unnamable, who was asking for poems to woo a lady. Unnamable is no longer here.

[Laindessiel]

I misread. Sorry, Mr. Birthday Boy! I though what you said was "I am Unnamable" from

"BTW, perhaps I'm the only one, but I miss Unnamable. I know we didn't always get along, but he was a character."

But anyways, you wooed your Mrs. Virgil back then. So it still makes sense. ;)

[Virgil]

I misread. Sorry, Mr. Birthday Boy! I though what you said was "I am Unnamable" from

"BTW, perhaps I'm the only one, but I miss Unnamable. I know we didn't always get along, but he was a character."

But anyways, you wooed your Mrs. Virgil back then. So it still makes sense. ;)

Yes I wooed Mrs. Virgil. :) Have you ever read my Limoncello poem. That was based on taking Mrs. Virgil out for her birthday back in April. Do a search on "Limoncello" or on threads started by me and you should find it.

[Laindessiel]

I will. And I will know how romantic you are, Uncle Virg....

[aXis]

sheesh - he's lying :P... he's not in love, he needs it for some work or school related assignment lol :D... just kidding - like everyone else said, write it from within you. I think she'd appreciate it more if it came from you, write exactly about how you feel about her - just turn it into words, doesn't have to rhyme.

[jon1jt]

im in love with a girl, she likes poetry very much, she asked me to write a poem about love, i dont know much , im not well versed can anybody help me with a well written poem about love.


give her my number, i have some poems about love. :D i'm just busting with ya. :lol:

[zanna]

what I wouldn't give to receive a poem like that from my guyfriend! way to go for trying. all i can say is amen, really. everyone else has already told you the important stuff. :) Best of luck to you. If it's not too personal, might you post the finished product?

[dramasnot6]

First off to write any good love poem, What do you think is love? Work from that :D

[AimusSage]

The best love poems do not contain the word love.

I hate poems that have the word love so explicitly mentioned.
I love poems that don't menion it.

[jon1jt]

i think you should just be corny given this is your first real love poem to her. why don't you go with a poem with each line that starts out with, I love when...
and plug in some cheesy things you like about her. :)

I love when you yell at me for no reason and later we make up and kiss.
I love when...

:)

[Neo_Sephiroth]

Dude, I think I've got one for you:idea: ...Okay, check this out...

Girl, you so fine:blush:
You blow my mind:flare:

Girl, I love you so much
You feel so good to touch

You drive me crazy, woman!:brickwall
But it feels like heaven. :angel:

Every morning, I see the sun come around you
Even drops of rain was glad it found you

You can even make the birds sing harmonies!
When your around, I'm like a baby...

You can make me cry or hurl:bawling:
You can make me laugh like a little school girl :lol:

When you speak to me
I go crazy

Your voice can get me so high:goof:
I swear I could just die!

Darling, there's nothing I can do
When it comes to you

I'm just an idiot and a fool
I can't stop thinking about you

I don't know much...
And I don't have much...

But I know I love you...
And can give you the devotion of a fool...

...I love you...

-Andy V. Khamsa A.K.A. Neo_Sephiroth

...Pretty good...If you don't mind me saying so myself...If your gonna use this...Don't forget to give credit where credit is due...

[robw]

Definitely avoid quoting song lyrics.

Have a think about what you think of her and also about the kind of person she is.

If she does a lot with her hair you could weave that in (slight pun intended). If she is into fitness then try to mention she always looks slender etc.
You must know how she smells, and what that means to you. She will love that you notice it and can comment.

It is good to rhyme but not if it gets in the way of what you mean.

Try to compare the way you feel about her to something that evokes the same mood in your mind (with a flattering aspect).

Oh.. and don't get obsessed just because you can't have her. Trust me.

[Neo_Sephiroth]

Okay...Dude...Just go for the super cheezy stuff, man!

Believe me...If she asked you to write a love poem for her...Something ain't right...

I mean..I don't think she really expects you to go all out poetic on her or anything...

I think she just wants a laugh by stressing you out, man...

...So go for the cheezy love, man!

[mir]

um . . .

no, total disagreeal, i think. :D

Girls get cheesy stuff all the time. If you want to win her, you have to be different. Think some stuff up yourself - things like, though this sucks,

The moon will glow, and stars still shine
Even if you are not mine
The sun will rise, bright day in line
Even if you are not mine.
And nothing will stop time -
Even if you are not mine.
But though nature will show no sign
Even if you are not mine,
None of it will steal my eyes,
None of it will catch my mind
I will be blind, my heart incised,
Unless you are mine.

. . Okay, that really sucked. :D but you get my point. it doesn't even have to rhyme - actually, it would be a lot better if it didn't, because EVERYTHING rhymes. what girls want is something different, and something that shows the person they like has really thought about it, so they can be sure he cares for them back, enough to really work on something for them.

[Miss Darcy]

The moon will glow, and stars still shine
Even if you are not mine
The sun will rise, bright day in line
Even if you are not mine.
And nothing will stop time -
Even if you are not mine.
But though nature will show no sign
Even if you are not mine,
None of it will steal my eyes,
None of it will catch my mind
I will be blind, my heart incised,
Unless you are mine.

I don't know why, but this somehow reminds me of Orlando's countless verses to Rosalind...:D

And definitely agreed. No cheesiness! Though of course I suppose it depends on what sort of girl she is. But I'm pretty sure that any girl would certainly prefer original, genuine feeling to anything else. :)

[stlukesguild]

You might try:

"There once was a man from Nantuckett..."

Oh yeah... that one didn't work...:blush:

[Scheherazade]

You might try:

"There once was a man from Nantuckett..."

Oh yeah... that one didn't work...:blush:Unless one is very sure of their poetic abilities, I think cheesiness and humour is the only way to go here.

I'd appreciate and care more about a humourous attempt than some cliche poem (because surely at that stage that person cannot know me well enough to mean all the 'deep' suggestions in a seriously romantic poem).

So 'There once was a man from Nantuckett...' or something similar can be more appealing (to me).

[thefemalemind]

Coming from a girl's point of view, I think something romantic sounds good. Tell her why you love her, what you like about her, how she makes you feel when you're around her, try mentioning a special occasion that you two share, et cetra.


-tfm

[Neo_Sephiroth]

...Since not many folks here wants anything cheezy...(Mmm...Cheese..) *Drools*

...Anyway...I got a serious one this time...Check it out...

Oh, my love...
How I love you so...

You are the most beautiful creature I've ever seen...

One glance from you would kill the faint of heart...
Your lips...Oh, your sweet lips...

I long to taste those sweet cherry lips...*Drools*...

But alas! I am but a pile of dung compare to you!

-Andy V. Khamsa A.K.A. Neo_Sephiroth

[tuncay_87]

im in love with a girl, she likes poetry very much, she asked me to write a poem about love, i dont know much , im not well versed can anybody help me with a well written poem about love.
last year at fall
a red rose
I had left at your door
did you take and smell it?
did you dry it and hid it in your bosom?
did you remember me while looking at it?
red roses are said to express love
could I express my love?
this fall too
I came with red roses to your door
with thousands of red roses
I was going to turn my heart
to your love paradise
your door was closed
you weren't there
you've left
red roses remained in my hands
there's a pain in my heart
red roses had dried
remained ownerless orphans
I have a solution
I'm still on watch at your door

[Redzeppelin]

The best poems provide images for the reader - pictures made out of words. Those have a far greater impact than any abstract ideas ("love" "romance" etc). Come up with pictures that you think communicate the idea of love, romance, affection, whatever - and that will be poetry.

Here's an example: if you wish to communicate loneliness, you have two choices:
1. Tell her - I am lonely.

2. Show her - I am an unopened letter, lying on the floor of your empty room.

(OK - so I'm no T.S. Eliot, but you get the idea hopefully. String together images that say what you feel, and poetry is what you'll have (at least embryonic beginnings, but that's where we all start - good luck)) :)

[Nick Rubashov]

roses are red
violets are blue
now go jump in bed
and I'll join you

[dramasnot6]

roses are red
violets are blue
now go jump in bed
and I'll join you

Gross. Not THAT type of love!!:sick:

[dramasnot6]

last year at fall
a red rose
I had left at your door
did you take and smell it?
did you dry it and hid it in your bosom?
did you remember me while looking at it?
red roses are said to express love
could I express my love?
this fall too
I came with red roses to your door
with thousands of red roses
I was going to turn my heart
to your love paradise
your door was closed
you weren't there
you've left
red roses remained in my hands
there's a pain in my heart
red roses had dried
remained ownerless orphans
I have a solution
I'm still on watch at your door


aww that is very sweet tuncay

[Redzeppelin]

roses are red
violets are blue
now go jump in bed
and I'll join you

Notice that the image created in the last two lines perfectly communicated its idea - (granted, the idea has nothing to do with love [unless they're married ;)]). Now just find images that communicate "love" (which tuncay did nicely).

[SaGe]

I've found that the English and/or Shakespearean Sonnet format lends itself to love poems.

If that's beneficial in any way...

[Redzeppelin]

Shakespeare's Sonnets are an entire "college education" in terms of poetry writing. Almost everything there is to learn about poetry is contained in his sonnets (unless you wish to write free verse).

[the Last 13]

write it yourself or it will just sound funny and forced......if your not into poetry think of it as a song it might come to you then.....tell the truth in the poem...dont say you feel this way or that if it isn't true....if you still cant come up with anything....then yeah who knows what could happen.....

[SaGe]

If you get stuck I'd recommend just thinking sbout her, why you like her, how she makes you feel, etc. Then write down your thoughts without regard for syntax, rhythm, rhyme scheme, or whatever, just exactly what you want to say in the actual poem. Then you could transform that to actual verse / poetry.

[Miss Darcy]

Sounds like a wise idea, SaGe. ;)

[Laindessiel]

um . . .

no, total disagreeal, i think. :D

Girls get cheesy stuff all the time. If you want to win her, you have to be different. Think some stuff up yourself - things like, though this sucks,

The moon will glow, and stars still shine
Even if you are not mine
The sun will rise, bright day in line
Even if you are not mine.
And nothing will stop time -
Even if you are not mine.
But though nature will show no sign
Even if you are not mine,
None of it will steal my eyes,
None of it will catch my mind
I will be blind, my heart incised,
Unless you are mine.

.

I like it a lot, Mir! I'd fall for you if you were the guy. :p


last year at fall
a red rose
I had left at your door
did you take and smell it?
did you dry it and hid it in your bosom?
did you remember me while looking at it?
red roses are said to express love
could I express my love?
this fall too
I came with red roses to your door
with thousands of red roses
I was going to turn my heart
to your love paradise
your door was closed
you weren't there
you've left
red roses remained in my hands
there's a pain in my heart
red roses had dried
remained ownerless orphans
I have a solution
I'm still on watch at your door


Alright! Wohoho....