dyingflame
12-09-2006, 07:06 AM
"My fits of joy are soiled by relentless flashbacks
and ghosts too foul to name...
while old shadows shroud the show
and shower shame with sorrows..."
The Myth of the Exploding Whale
My father once lived in a world of staccato rattle-chords-
firing away wide-eyed rhythms with worded, groove-ended nails;
flowing forth the flailing births of reluctant fiction-fulcrums,
the spokes set forth a hint of smoke that chained the custard scales;
alternate skies, unfiltered grimes, of tobacco-stifled change.
My god, how that old machine spat out his venom with denial!
It made our dwelling tremble in its roots, the furniture radiated, the floors cracked-
as fires spirited out, thrown, slammed onto
the ice-laden plains on conscious grounds,
until one whip of lead ended the gamble
and the line was left tone-hanging
in the upbeat search
for plastic dynamite.
For he had witnessed the intent portent:
The failings he had helped shadow-sketch-
and found the final burst of urban legends,
an explosion too stale to inhale.
The sudden cadence of a planned and sudden end,
and of many spiral ladders.
...The never-finished drowned in sand,
filled with wails and silent adders.
(c) 2006
By Neville bezzina
This a poem I wrote a month ago...considered by many of my close friends family and mentors as my best effort yet...I must say I'm glad with it and would like to hear some comments. (I will talk about it later so as not to affect any potential reader with my point of view) thanks!
and ghosts too foul to name...
while old shadows shroud the show
and shower shame with sorrows..."
The Myth of the Exploding Whale
My father once lived in a world of staccato rattle-chords-
firing away wide-eyed rhythms with worded, groove-ended nails;
flowing forth the flailing births of reluctant fiction-fulcrums,
the spokes set forth a hint of smoke that chained the custard scales;
alternate skies, unfiltered grimes, of tobacco-stifled change.
My god, how that old machine spat out his venom with denial!
It made our dwelling tremble in its roots, the furniture radiated, the floors cracked-
as fires spirited out, thrown, slammed onto
the ice-laden plains on conscious grounds,
until one whip of lead ended the gamble
and the line was left tone-hanging
in the upbeat search
for plastic dynamite.
For he had witnessed the intent portent:
The failings he had helped shadow-sketch-
and found the final burst of urban legends,
an explosion too stale to inhale.
The sudden cadence of a planned and sudden end,
and of many spiral ladders.
...The never-finished drowned in sand,
filled with wails and silent adders.
(c) 2006
By Neville bezzina
This a poem I wrote a month ago...considered by many of my close friends family and mentors as my best effort yet...I must say I'm glad with it and would like to hear some comments. (I will talk about it later so as not to affect any potential reader with my point of view) thanks!