A Love Poem

[atiguhya padma]

Why should I ever wish to wake
Into this weary world I see?
It never wants my dreams to make
By letting your love live for me

It only ever wants to tease
And tempt my empty longing heart
It mocks all my attempts to please
And laughs whenever you depart

I walk along a pavement grey
That is the colour of the sky
Into another restless day
That will not pass me by

Why can't I dream myself a life where you and I are ever free
To live our days with love alive as dreams are meant to be?

[den]

This is lovely, great ~flow~ and rhythm to it. It's how I feel, in sad/hibernation mode here these days <sigh>

[azmuse]

nice ending...i like how it lingers.

[surf boy]

azmuse, clean out your pm box.

[azmuse]

OOPS!

[angel]

Its a beautiful poem .... simple words saying a lot .....

[atiguhya padma]

Well thank you angel.

Tell me, are you in disguise?:)

[Waendoliel]

Really nice poem. It all feels very natural and real.

[angel]

Hey atiguhya padma .... me in disguise ?? :)
and if not angel what do you think I am ??

[atiguhya padma]

Hey angel,

You sure must be busy elsewhere in the world (or Heaven) as you've only visited us 3 times since May 2003.

Did someone kick you out? (of Heaven that is.):)

You know what I reckon? I reckon your not an angel at all. I reckon your a poster. Or maybe even just a post. Or even a series of posts (albeit with only 3 episodes). After a few more posts, you'll probably develop a perceivable personality. When you reach the giddy heights of a thousand posts, people will already think they know who you are.

Just like life really....

[angel]

Hey atiguhya padma ...u got it right .. i m kinda busy ....
but well .. i didnt get kicked out ......rather .. am now comfortably settled in heaven .... with now worries .....i do read most of the post ...without logging in :) ....

[avid_reader]

Why should I ever wish to come back into the forum time and again like an addict .... ?
only .. only to read such gems and make myself happy once in a while ...

felt nice reading it .. the flow is superb . good work padma . thanks for sharing

[atiguhya padma]

Thank you, Avid Reader. Thank you for sharing what you felt about this poem.

AP

[Suetang]

A very nice write, much enjoyed.

Take care.........Sue

[subterranean]

Why can't I dream myself a life where you and I are ever free
To live our days with love alive as dreams are meant to be?

at the moment, these lines really speak for my heart

[atiguhya padma]

SubT,

I hope you make your dream a reality.

AP

[subterranean]

thanks AP.. i noticed some of ur personal poetries, nice stuffs.

[the mooring]

it is very emotional and beautiful poem

[atiguhya padma]

Well thanks. That's very sweet of you.

[rocksea]

simple lines, with passion and spreading the passion :)
it does have the rythm too
and blends well with life inside outside

[vango]

beautiful poem. i like it very much
but, here i'm confused


It mocks all my attempts to please
And laughs whenever you depart

how how can one be pleased and laugh when his lover departs?
i'm sorry i 'm not good at english so i may misunderstand you. but i really appreciate your poem, and i hope i can understand it wholely, so i ask you this question that should not be asked.

[atiguhya padma]

Vango,

Thank you for your comments. I am glad you liked my poem. The two lines you quote are referring to line 2 of the poem, in particular, the weary world. It is the world that mocks all my attempts to please, it is the world that laughs when she departs. It is a cry against the blind fate of the world, the injustice of unrequited love.

AP

[vango]

thank you, AP. i got it. it's the world that laughs rather than you.
i read it again, and find it is still more beautiful than when i read it first time

[farnoosh]

i loved the ending
its the same thing i say in my mind everyday